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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowled v.82

People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. 82
No person in this world will achieve success if one will not work hard for his/her goal. However, I do believe that only hard work will not be sufficient to reach out objective; smart work is also required in today' s competitive world. I will elaborate my ideas in my further paragraphs. To embark on, no one can deny that all famous and successful persons work rigorously to achieve their goals; they have sacrifices several thing in their life. For instance, Rajni Kant - a renowned India movie star - was a bus conductor prior to reach his success. However, during his difficult time, he never stopped practicing his acting talent, and never gave up his dream. He would have lost in that tough situation, had he gave up his dream, and stopped believing his ability. Self-confidence and self-belief are two major qualities of successful persons. Furthermore, are we all successful although we all work hard? The answer is definite " No" , because not everyone can perceive opportunity. A stone can be break in one blow, if one hit the stone at the right spot and with right force. Similarly, if a person can detect opportunity at right time with all relevant efforts and resources, success is guaranteed. For instance, Steve Job - a great visionary - was successful because of his capability to identify the opportunity. There were hundreds of companies dealing with electronic products, but Steve could identify the need of the market at correct time, and came up with a product - " Iphone" , which fascinate consumers, and later success story is known to all. To recapitulate, although hard work is necessary to be a successful person, the other qualities such as self-confidence, self-belief and ability to grab opportunity are also important.
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in this world will achieve
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if one will not
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work
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for his/her goal.
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, I do believe that
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is
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and
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successful
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persons
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work
rigorously
to achieve their goals; they have sacrifices
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in their life.
For instance
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Rajni
Kant
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a renowned India movie star
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was a bus conductor prior to reach his
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success
.
However
, during his difficult time, he never
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stopped
practicing his acting talent, and never gave up his dream. He would have lost in that tough situation, had he gave up his dream, and
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stopped
believing his ability. Self-confidence and self-belief are two major qualities of
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successful
persons.

Furthermore
, are we all
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successful
although we all
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work
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hard
? The answer is
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,
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because
not everyone can perceive
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opportunity
. A stone can be break in one blow, if one hit the stone at the right spot and with right force.
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, if a
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person
can detect
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opportunity
at right time with all relevant efforts and resources,
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success
is guaranteed
.
For instance
, Steve Job
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a great visionary
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was
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successful
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because
of his capability to identify the
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opportunity
. There were hundreds of
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companies
dealing with electronic products,
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but
Steve could identify the need of the market at correct time, and came up with a product
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-
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;
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Iphone&quot
;
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,
which fascinate consumers, and later
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success
story
is known
to all.

To recapitulate, although
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hard
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work
is necessary to be a
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successful
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person
, the other qualities such as self-confidence, self-belief and ability to grab
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opportunity
are
also
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9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS essay People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. 82

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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