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when faced with a problem some people do research before they act, while others prefer to try to solve the problem right away. which do you prefer. v.1

when faced with a problem some people do research before they act, while others prefer to try to solve the problem right away. which do you prefer. v. 1
In this day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on the phenomenon that people have different views about whether governments should introduce a maximum wage. While in some ways it may seem reasonable to allow people to earn as much as companies are willing to pay, I personally believe that employee remuneration should be limited at a certain level. There are several reasons that many companies are willing to pay a huge wage for some individuals. Firstly, the ideal salaries are easily attractive to the talented and gifted people. To be more specific, the professional employees have potential abilities than ordinary staffs, which helps companies smoothly approach new advanced methods as well as the achievement of companies. For example, the cutting-edged technology firm like Google, they are willing to pay an amount of large money to rent the intelligent programmers who have likelihoods to promote their firms. Furthermore, the appealing salaries are likely to be highly motivated the workers that results in the successful productivity of personnel. I agree that the authorities should not permit a cutting- off wage for few excellent staffs. In addition, the pay-gap between the bosses and the employees are extremely wide distance, so some of them to the negative sites as well as effect on them in their jobs. To be more clear, the lower executive salaries could be reduced that results in the positive directions of their views. Furthermore, the regulation of the minimum wages not only alleviates the subjective sites to their companies, but also helps reduce the poverty and crime rate in social in favour of thriving in fair humanity. In conclusion, it is better that the governments should restrain the highest wages of earners at an accurate level promoting balance the standard of the community.
In this day and age, more and more contemporary attention has
been placed
on the phenomenon that
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people
have
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different
views about whether
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governments
should introduce a maximum wage. While in
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some
ways it may seem reasonable to
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allow
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people
to earn as much as
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companies
are willing to pay, I
personally
believe that employee remuneration should
be limited
at a certain level.

There are several reasons that
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many
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companies
are willing to pay a huge wage for
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some
individuals.
Firstly
, the ideal salaries are
easily
attractive to the talented and gifted
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people
. To be more specific, the professional employees have potential abilities than ordinary staffs, which
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helps
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companies
smoothly
approach new advanced methods
as well
as the achievement of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
.
For example
, the cutting-edged technology firm like Google, they are willing to pay an amount of large money to rent the intelligent programmers who have likelihoods to promote their firms.
Furthermore
, the appealing salaries are likely to be
highly
motivated the workers that results in the successful productivity of personnel.

I
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agree
that the authorities should not permit a cutting- off wage for few excellent staffs.
In addition
, the pay-gap between the bosses and the employees are
extremely
wide distance,
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so
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some
of them to the
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negative
sites
as well
as effect on them in their jobs. To be more
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clear
, the lower executive salaries could be
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reduced
that results in the
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positive
directions of their views.
Furthermore
, the regulation of the minimum wages not
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only
alleviates the subjective sites to their
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companies
,
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but
also
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helps
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reduce
the poverty and crime rate in social in
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favour
of thriving in
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fair
humanity.

In conclusion
, it is better that the
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governments
should restrain the highest wages of earners at an accurate level promoting balance the standard of the community.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay when faced with a problem some people do research before they act, while others prefer to try to solve the problem right away. which do you prefer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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