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describe an object that is very special in your life. explain why this object is important to you. include details and examples in your explanation. v.3

describe an object that is very special in your life. explain why this object is important to you. include details and examples in your explanation. v. 3
Wealth and joyfulness are paramount in one’s life. However, there has been a debate among the majority of people that riches do not equate cheerfulness. The reasons why happiness is tough to interpret, and how people could achieve it would be discussed. Firstly, one of the reasons why it is arduous to depict happiness is that it cannot be quantified. In other words, being joyous cannot be measured or numerically attached because it is determined and controlled by one’s emotion. Another reason why it is hard to define joyfulness is that it is unpredictable. People’s expectation are sometimes not met, and a result of this, people’s reaction or response to this situation makes it difficult to define happiness. For instance, my wife currently works as a class teacher in one of the Nursery Schools with a good salary, but she’s not happy because her expectation was that she would get a job, even if it is with a lesser salary than teaching, as a make-up artist with one of the cosmetology companies. Nevertheless, there are various ways in which people can attain a state of being happy. One of these major ways is self-contentment. Being satisfied with whatever one has, has proven to be effective in gaining happiness. Another way to earn happiness is by doing or following one’s heart desires. It is believed by some persons that passion birth happiness. That is, one could derive joy from doing something passionately. To illustrate, a research conducted by the World Health Organization in the year 2018 showed that Doctors in the Eastern part of Africa are happy with the nature of their job despite the fact that they are being underpaid. In conclusion, while the major reasons why joyfulness is hard to define is that it cannot be quantified, and it cannot be predictable, self-contentment and following one’s heart desires are factors people could use to earn a state of being happy.
Wealth and joyfulness are paramount in one’s life.
However
, there has been a debate among the majority of
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people
that riches do not equate cheerfulness. The
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reasons
why
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happiness
is tough to interpret, and how
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people
could achieve it would
be discussed
.

Firstly
, one of the
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reasons
why it is arduous to depict
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happiness
is that it cannot
be quantified
.
In other words
, being joyous cannot
be measured
or
numerically
attached
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because
it
is determined
and controlled by one’s emotion. Another
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reason
why it is
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hard
to define joyfulness is that it is unpredictable.
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People’s
expectation are
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sometimes
not met, and a result of this,
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people’s
reaction or response to this situation
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makes
it difficult to define
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happiness
.
For instance
, my wife
currently
works as a
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class
teacher in one of the Nursery Schools with a
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good
salary,
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but
she’s not
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happy
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because
her expectation was that she would
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get
a job, even if it is with a lesser salary than teaching, as a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
-up artist with one of the cosmetology
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companies
.

Nevertheless
, there are various ways in which
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people
can attain a state of being
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happy
. One of these major ways is self-contentment.
Being satisfied
with whatever one has, has proven to be effective in gaining
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happiness
. Another way to earn
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happiness
is by doing or following one’s heart desires. It
is believed
by
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some
persons that passion birth
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happiness
.
That is
, one could derive joy from doing something
passionately
. To illustrate,
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a research
conducted by the World Health Organization in the year 2018
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showed
that Doctors in the Eastern part of Africa are
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happy
with the nature of their job despite the fact that they are being underpaid.

In conclusion
, while the major
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reasons
why joyfulness is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to define is that it cannot
be quantified
, and it cannot be predictable, self-contentment and following one’s heart desires are factors
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people
could
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use
to earn a state of being
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happy
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay describe an object that is very special in your life. explain why this object is important to you. include details and examples in your explanation. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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