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The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity? v.1

The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity? v. 1
The problem of ever-growing population has stroked as a global issue encountered by today’s generation. The main reasons for this rapid growth are mainly due to an ineffective population control measures and advancement in the healthcare system. This essay agrees that the steady rise of population is the major threat to mankind in this era because of its greatest impact on the environment and the wellbeing of the human beings. Population growth is reciprocal to the effectiveness of birth control methods like family planning and adequate knowledge on reproductive health. An increase in effectiveness of control measures lowers the birth rates. There are many cases of failure of such measures leading to unwanted pregnancies resulted from improper usage. In addition, newly invented technologies in the healthcare system have increased the life span of human beings resulting in decrease birth rates. For instance, many women prefer to use temporary birth control measures like birth control pills which are easy to use, but less efficient and that result in increased birth rates and available treatments for many fatal diseases like cancer, myocardial infraction results in increase life span. In recent times, the greatest issue for humankind is the detrimental effect of rapid population growth on the environment and health. The environment is greatly destroyed by the human activities. An increased population demands for increase housing, employments and productions that resulted in the destruction of greenery and fertile lands turned to be industrial areas that in turn lead to pollutions and various health issues. In particular, air pollution is the most common problems caused by human activities that lead to many respiratory problems of mankind. In conclusion, a rapid population growth is a serious problem resulted from inefficient population control measures and limited knowledge on controlling as well as improvements in healthcare facility leading to a longer life span. The subsequent impacts of this rapid growth on human beings are becoming serious due to irreversible damage to ecosystem.
The
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problem
of ever-growing
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population
has stroked as a global issue encountered by
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today
’s generation. The main reasons for this
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rapid
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growth
are
mainly
due to an ineffective
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population
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control
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measures
and advancement in the healthcare system. This essay
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agrees
that the steady rise of
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population
is the major threat to mankind in this era
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because
of its greatest impact on the environment and the
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wellbeing
of the
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human
beings.

Population
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growth
is reciprocal to the effectiveness of
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birth
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control
methods like family planning and adequate knowledge on reproductive health. An increase in effectiveness of
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control
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measures
lowers the
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birth
rates. There are
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many
cases of failure of such
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measures
leading to unwanted pregnancies resulted from improper usage.
In addition
,
newly
invented technologies in the healthcare system have increased the life span of
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human
beings resulting in decrease
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birth
rates.
For instance
,
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many
women prefer to
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use
temporary
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birth
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control
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measures
like
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birth
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control
pills which are easy to
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use
,
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but
less efficient and that result in increased
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birth
rates and available treatments for
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many
fatal diseases like cancer, myocardial infraction results in increase life span.

In recent times, the greatest issue for humankind is the detrimental effect of
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rapid
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population
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growth
on the environment and health. The environment is
greatly
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destroyed
by the
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human
activities. An increased
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population
demands for increase housing, employments and productions that resulted in the destruction of greenery and fertile lands turned to be industrial areas that in turn lead to pollutions and various health issues.
In particular
, air pollution is the most common
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problems
caused by
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human
activities that lead to
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many
respiratory
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problems
of mankind.

In conclusion
, a
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rapid
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population
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growth
is a serious
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problem
resulted from inefficient
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population
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control
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measures
and limited knowledge on controlling
as well
as improvements in healthcare facility leading to a longer life span. The subsequent impacts of this
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rapid
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growth
on
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human
beings are becoming serious due to irreversible damage to ecosystem.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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