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When communicating with your friends and families, you can rely on letters, email or telephone calls. Which method of communicating do you think isbetter and why? v.1

When communicating with your friends and families, you can rely on letters, email or telephone calls. Which method of communicating do you think isbetter and why? v. 1
It is now a common occurrence for families to migrate to a new country. Although it is believed that this can benefit the young ones, others think this decision might be extremely difficult for a child in a new country. In my opinion, I believe that moving to a new nation will be of immense benefit to a child. On the one hand, in order to give their children more sound education, parents tend to move them to another country. This is because it is possible that the present place of residence of an individual might not be beneficial academically to a child, in this situation fathers and mothers could consider a move to other countries whose primary focus is standard learning for the child. For example, it is now a common trend for parents in Nigeria to relocate to more developed countries like Canada in order to improve the quality of education received by the child. In my opinion, I believe in order to ensure that a child receives optimal education, the parents can move to another country as this can help build a brighter future for the child. On the other hand, others think that this big move might be hard for a child because of the psychological effect it might create. This is because a move to a new place means a change of environment and friends and the young one might find it difficult to adapt to this, thus, resulting in loneliness which could inadvertently lead to depression in the offspring. For example, the WHO reported a surge in depression among children in 2018 as a result of relocation to a new state. In conclusion, although relocating a child to a new state might have a depressing effect on a child, I believe that parents relocate their children in order to afford them a better education which might not be available in their present state.
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might
be
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difficult for a
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child
in a
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new
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country
. In my opinion, I believe that moving to a
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nation will be of immense benefit to a child.

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order
to give their children more sound
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education
,
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parents
tend to
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move
them to another
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country
. This is
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because
it is possible that the present place of residence of an individual
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might
not be beneficial
academically
to a
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child
, in this situation fathers and mothers could consider a
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move
to
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other
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countries
whose primary focus is standard learning for the
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child
.
For example
, it is
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now
a common trend for
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parents
in Nigeria to relocate to more developed
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countries
like Canada in
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order
to
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improve
the quality of
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education
received by the
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child
. In my opinion, I believe in
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order
to ensure that a
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child
receives optimal
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education
, the
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parents
can
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move
to another
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country
as this can
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help
build a brighter future for the child.

On the
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hand, others
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think
that this
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big
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be
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for a
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child
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of the psychological effect it
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create. This is
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a
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to a
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place means a
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of environment and friends and the young one
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might
find it difficult to adapt to this,
thus
, resulting in loneliness which could
inadvertently
lead to depression in the offspring.
For example
, the WHO reported a surge in depression among children in 2018
as a result
of relocation to a
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new
state.

In conclusion
, although relocating a
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child
to a
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new
state
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might
have a depressing effect on a
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child
, I believe that
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parents
relocate their children in
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order
to afford them a better
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education
which
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might
not be available in their present state.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay When communicating with your friends and families, you can rely on letters, email or telephone calls. Which method of communicating do you think isbetter and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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