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57. When communicating with your friends and families, you can rely on letters, email or telephone calls. Which method of communicating do you think isbetter and why? v.1

57. When communicating with your friends and families, you can rely on letters, email or telephone calls. Which method of communicating do you think isbetter and why? v. 1
It is witnessed that dogs are eminent pets in all over the world. It is opined by many people of the society that keeping dogs in urban areas it can be dangerous. This essay will discuss it. To start with copious masses love to keep dogs at home in metropolitan section. Owing to safety and recreational activities. Although can be saved, their house from thieves, it is a way of entertainment. Whenever once alone in our houses and they don't have any person whom they gossip and play any game with them so dogs comprehend in playing and it is ideal to time pass. However dogs are lending a helping hand in robbery cases. For instance, Plethora of dogs to gives training from and military so in some military cases it helps to find the any harmful things so they defence send to sniffer dogs in indoor of any room or area where they feel may have dangerous for them so it is very helpful in these cases. Furthermore, it is helpful in many of the cases it is detrimental owing to attach on children or their owner. Firstly, many children's plays in the streets so dogs often claim on them as well as a lot of cases suspected, in which the attack dogs on their own while they giving food to dogs. Apart from this, people have lack of space in houses in urban departments since they keep dogs with them. Dogs have many harmful health problems and sometimes effect on their own. Either they don't keep dogs in urban areas or keep it in separate places of the house In conclusion, Many people feel deep sense oh happiness in keeping dogs, but it can be dangerous for keeping it in urban areas because of these reasons. Eventually, believe that it is not apparent to keep dogs in urban areas.
It
is witnessed
that
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dogs
are eminent pets in all over the world. It
is opined
by
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many
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people
of the society that keeping
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dogs
in
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urban
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areas
it can be
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dangerous
. This essay will discuss it.

To
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start
with copious masses
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love
to
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keep
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dogs
at home in metropolitan section. Owing to safety and recreational activities. Although can
be saved
, their
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house
from thieves, it is a way of entertainment. Whenever once alone in our
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houses and
they don't have any person whom they gossip and play any game with them
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so
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dogs
comprehend in playing and it is ideal to time pass.
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However
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dogs
are lending a helping hand in robbery cases.
For instance
, Plethora of
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dogs
to
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gives
training from and military
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so
in
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some
military cases it
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helps
to find the any harmful things
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so
Do not use a noun immediately after the pronoun 'they'. Use a verb or an adverb, or possibly some other part of speech.
they defence
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send
to sniffer
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dogs
in indoor of any room or
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area
where they feel may have
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dangerous
for them
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so
it is
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very
helpful in these cases.

Furthermore
, it is helpful in
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many
of the cases it is detrimental owing to attach on children or their owner.
Firstly
,
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many
children's plays in the streets
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so
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dogs
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often
claim on them
as well
as
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a lot of
cases suspected, in which the attack
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dogs
on their
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own
while
Did you mean "they're giving", "they are giving", or "they were giving"?
they giving
food to
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dogs
. Apart from this,
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people
have lack of space in
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houses
in
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urban
departments since they
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keep
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dogs
with them.
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Dogs
have
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many
harmful health problems and
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sometimes
effect on their
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own
. Either they don't
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keep
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dogs
in
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urban
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areas
or
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keep
it in separate places of the
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house


In conclusion
,
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Many
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people
feel deep sense oh happiness in keeping
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dogs
,
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but
it can be
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dangerous
for keeping it in
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urban
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areas
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because
of these reasons.
Eventually
, believe that it is not apparent to
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keep
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dogs
in
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urban
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areas
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay 57. When communicating with your friends and families, you can rely on letters, email or telephone calls. Which method of communicating do you think isbetter and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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