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The two pie charts below show the pollution entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007 v.1

The two pie charts below show the pollution entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007 v. 1
People are now becoming health conscious than earlier ages due to the vulnerability of diseases is also high. It is proved that balanced meals and regular physical activities to determine the health of human beings, hence their stress could be curbed. This essay will discuss in detail what people in my country should do in order to keep a better health. First, never would anyone become healthy unless having a regular diet including required nutrition such as protein, vitamin and calcium. Fortunately, our country is an island which owns a large area of ocean with huge amount of fish to obtain enough protein and calcium. Furthermore, as an agricultural state, Lanka is rich in fresh fruits and vegetables for the citizens. However, it is told by medical professionals, although Sri Lankans has enough nutritious food, they often take meals at irregular times. It would be the cause of many issues in digesting system that has been reported over the last few years. Hence, people should receive meals within regular gaps in time. In this way, they can improve health through fresh foods having them in regularly. Secondly, the significance of exercise in health cannot be neglected because people consume considerable time without doing any physical activity nowadays in this country. Hardly would working class involve in regular exercise as they are unable to reserve spare time. It is an adverse effect on health of youngsters. To illustrate, recent research revealed that two of every ten Sri Lankan are overweight due to less work outs. Therefore, we should burn calories by involving numerous physical activities. Fortunately, the government has developed jogging tracks where people can access them easily. Thus, citizens can jog in free time after office work. Further, Sri Lankans can get rid of breathing issues reported recently, by regular swimming. In a nutshell, regular food intake and physical interaction are the paramount habits that every Sri Lankan should practice. Obviously, fresh food is widely available in the country to prepare meals on time. Finally, citizens should use available workout options such as jogging and swimming to reduce stress and obesity.
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than earlier ages due to the vulnerability of diseases is
also
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meals
and
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regular
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physical
activities to determine the
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health
of human beings,
hence
their
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stress
could
be curbed
. This essay will discuss in detail what
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people
in my
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country
should do in order to
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keep
a better health.

First
, never would anyone become healthy unless having a
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regular
diet including required nutrition such as protein, vitamin and calcium.
Fortunately
, our
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country
is an island which
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owns
a large area of ocean with huge amount of fish to obtain
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enough
protein and calcium.
Furthermore
, as an agricultural state, Lanka is rich in fresh fruits and vegetables for the citizens.
However
, it is
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told
by medical professionals, although Sri
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Lankans
has
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enough
nutritious
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food
, they
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often
take
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meals
at irregular
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times
. It would be the cause of
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many
issues in digesting system that has
been reported
over the last few years.
Hence
,
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people
should receive
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meals
within
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regular
gaps in
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time
. In this way, they can
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improve
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health
through fresh
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foods
having them in
regularly
.

Secondly
, the significance of exercise in
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health
cannot
be neglected
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because
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people
consume considerable
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time
without doing any
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physical
activity nowadays in this
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country
. Hardly would
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working
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class
involve in
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regular
exercise as they are unable to reserve spare
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time
. It is an adverse effect on
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health
of youngsters. To illustrate, recent research revealed that two of every ten Sri Lankan are overweight due to less work outs.
Therefore
, we should burn calories by involving numerous
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physical
activities.
Fortunately
, the
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government
has developed jogging
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tracks
where
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people
can access them
easily
.
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, citizens can jog in free
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time
after office work.
Further
, Sri
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Lankans can
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get
rid of breathing issues reported recently, by
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regular
swimming.

In a nutshell,
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regular
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food
intake and
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physical
interaction are the paramount habits that every Sri Lankan should practice.
Obviously
, fresh
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food
is
widely
available in the
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country
to prepare
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meals
on
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time
.
Finally
, citizens should
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use
available workout options such as jogging and swimming to
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reduce
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stress
and obesity.
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IELTS essay The two pie charts below show the pollution entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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