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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, email, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v.162

Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, email, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 162
It is believed that nowadays, Children spend most of their free time with the modern technology. I think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Modern technologies have always made our life easy and simple. It has helped us to work smart and efficient than work hard. Gadgets make our lives less complicated. Nowadays, children spend most of their free time with new technologies. For instance, they spend many hours playing video games or watching cartoons. Playing video game is beneficial in improving the concentration in children. Gadgets like Kindle help kids read many books as they are cheap and parents can afford it easily. Internet helps children learn new things and has always helped them find new hobbies. They can connect with the world easily, thus expanding their knowledge. On the other hand, spending most of the free time with new technologies has their share of disadvantages on children. For instance, spending a lot of time on video games or gadgets has become one of the reasons for developing health issues in children in their early childhood. Children tend to get addicted to the gadgets which in turn can cause a negative impact in their studies and other daily activities. Obesity has become one of the main diseases in children due to their lack of physical activity. Excessive use of gadgets has made children lose their interest with the real world, family and friends. In conclusion, new technologies when used moderately with right balance and under proper guidance can be advantageous to children and they can live their life to the fullest. Thus, they can spend their free hour effectively with new technologies.
It
is believed
that nowadays,
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Children
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spend
most of their
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free
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time
with the modern
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technology
. I
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think
the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Modern
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technologies
have always made our life easy and simple. It has
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helped
us to work smart and
Use "(efficient)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
efficient
than work
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hard
.
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Gadgets
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
our
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lives
less complicated.

Nowadays,
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children
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spend
most of their
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free
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time
with
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new
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technologies
.
For instance
, they
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spend
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many
hours playing video games or watching cartoons. Playing video game is beneficial in improving the concentration in
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children
.
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Gadgets
like Kindle
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help
kids read
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many
books as they are
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cheap
and parents can afford it
easily
. Internet
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helps
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children
learn
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new
things and has always
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helped
them find
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new
hobbies. They can connect with the world
easily
,
thus
expanding their knowledge.

On the other hand
, spending most of the
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free
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time
with
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new
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technologies
has their share of disadvantages on
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children
.
For instance
, spending
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a lot of
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time
on video games or
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gadgets
has become one of the reasons for developing health issues in
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children
in their early childhood.
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Children
tend to
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get
addicted to the
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gadgets
which in turn can cause a
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negative
impact in their studies and other daily activities. Obesity has become one of the main diseases in
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children
due to their lack of physical activity. Excessive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
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gadgets
has made
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children
lose their interest with the real world, family and friends.

In conclusion
,
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new
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technologies
when
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used
moderately
with right balance and under proper guidance can be advantageous to
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
children and
they can
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live
their life to the fullest.
Thus
, they can
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spend
their
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free
hour
effectively
with
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new
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technologies
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, email, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 162

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
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