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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try to keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.8

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try to keep them alive. with this opinion? v. 8
As countries develop, many people become concerned that this means the end of traditional skills and ways of life. I don’t think this is inevitable, as some people claim. Some people enjoy living in traditional ways. In the United States, there is a group of people called the Amish who refuses to use modern technology. In many developed countries, thousands of people are returning to a more traditional lifestyle – living with less technology and growing their own food in traditional ways – and loving it. A search on the Internet reveals that some people are running successful small businesses, producing items such as clothing and toys in traditional ways. Clearly, there are not only people who maintain traditional lifestyles and skills, but there are many more who appreciate them. Perhaps this is more popular in more developed countries where some people have experienced ‘modern’ life and are not satisfied with it. Of course, most people do change their lifestyles as their societies and countries develop. Is this so bad? I wonder how many people in modern societies would like to go back to ‘traditional’ ways of living in small, unstable buildings prone to destruction and sleeping in unsanitary conditions. It seems there is a general human desire to long for ‘the good old days’ and traditional lifestyles, yet, given the choice, the vast majority would happily forego traditions and modernise. What most often happens is that people keep some traditions and skills and forget others. In conclusion, I cannot say that it is pointless to try to keep traditions alive. As long as such traditions do no harm to others, it should be up to the individual what lifestyle they want to lead and whether they want to keep particular traditions and skills alive. However, I cannot agree that the loss of traditional ways of life and skills is inevitable.
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develop,
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become concerned that this means the
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of life. I don’t
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this is inevitable, as
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claim.

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enjoy living in
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traditional
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. In the United States, there is a group of
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people
called the Amish who refuses to
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use
modern technology. In
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many
developed
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countries
, thousands of
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people
are returning to a more
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traditional
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lifestyle
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–
living with less technology and growing their
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own
food in
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traditional
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ways
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and loving it. A search on the Internet reveals that
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some
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people
are running successful
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small
businesses, producing items such as clothing and toys in
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traditional
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ways
.
Clearly
, there are not
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only
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people
who maintain
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traditional
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lifestyles
and
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skills
,
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there are
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many
more who appreciate them. Perhaps this is more popular in more developed
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countries
where
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some
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people
have experienced ‘modern’ life and are not satisfied with it.

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, most
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people
do
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change
their
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lifestyles
as their societies and
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countries
develop. Is this
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so
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bad
? I wonder how
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many
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people
in modern societies would like to go back to
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‘traditional’
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ways
of living in
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small
, unstable buildings prone to destruction and sleeping in unsanitary conditions. It seems there is a general human desire to long for ‘the
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good
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days’ and
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traditional
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,
yet
,
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given
the choice, the vast majority would
happily
forego
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traditions
and
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modernise
. What most
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happens is that
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and
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and forget others.

In conclusion
, I cannot say that it is pointless to try to
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alive. As long as such
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do no harm to others, it should be up to the individual what
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lifestyle
they want to lead and whether they want to
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keep
particular
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and
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alive.
However
, I cannot
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that the loss of
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of life and
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is inevitable.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try to keep them alive. with this opinion? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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