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when a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. it is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.15

when a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. it is pointless to try and keep them alive. with this opinion? v. 15
Technology changed the features of everything around us, however, our original treats linger. While a country enhances its technological development, the conventional skills and styles of living vanish. Moreover, it does not make any sense to hold onto them. The Essay will argue why this is completely preposterous. Although it's really hard to keep the traditional habits and ways of life alive when a nation develops its technology, it's always worth it. Furthermore, it is those original characterestics that distinguish a human race from another. For instance, in Japan, despite the major scientific achievements, they still believe in the simple spiritual superstitions of their ancestors. Therefore, preserving the ancient authentic style of life does not contradict with the ability of development. On the contrary, some people think that it's useless to hold on to the ancient way in which people used to live while dealing with modern technology. Indeed, that would be not only difficult, but also pointless. For example, in China, old museums are replaced with modern scientific galleries. Consequently, it's not always feasible not to give up on the traditional form of life while adapting to the current technological evolution. In conclusion, it's illogical for a nation to endeavour not to let go of our authentic skills and conventional lifestyle when it works on its technology. The Essay argued why this is extremely inaccurate. In my opinion, there is no contradiction between such goals and it's totally acceptable to stick to what our ancestors passed to us through different generations and also cope with the modern world.
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Technology
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changed
the features of everything around us,
however
, our original treats linger. While a country enhances its technological development, the conventional
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skills
and styles of living vanish.
Moreover
, it does not
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make
any sense to hold onto them. The Essay will argue why this is completely preposterous.

Although
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it's
really
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hard
to
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keep
the traditional habits and ways of life alive when a nation develops its
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technology
,
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it's
always worth it.
Furthermore
, it is those original
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characterestics
that distinguish a human race from another.
For instance
, in Japan, despite the major scientific achievements, they
still
believe in the simple spiritual superstitions of their ancestors.
Therefore
, preserving the ancient authentic style of life does not contradict with the ability of development.

On the contrary
,
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some
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people
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think
that
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it's
useless to hold on to the ancient way in which
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people
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used
to
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live
while dealing with modern
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technology
.
Indeed
, that would be not
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only
difficult,
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but
also
pointless.
For example
, in China,
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old
museums
are replaced
with modern scientific galleries.
Consequently
,
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it's
not always feasible not to give up on the traditional form of life while adapting to the
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current
technological evolution.

In conclusion
,
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it's
illogical for a nation to
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endeavour
not to
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let
go of our authentic
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skills
and conventional lifestyle when it works on its
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technology
. The Essay argued why this is
extremely
inaccurate. In my opinion, there is no contradiction between such goals and
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it's
totally
acceptable to stick to what our ancestors passed to us through
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different
generations and
also
cope with the modern world.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay when a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. it is pointless to try and keep them alive. with this opinion? v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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