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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.10

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. with this opinion? v. 10
These days, in developing countries have started investing more on technology to take part in the worldwide trade. This innovative trend has, of course, blurred traditional skills and ways of life, losing relevant and historical signs of societies. I completely agree with the need to fight this dying out of traditions and in this essay I will support my opinion with examples. There are several drawbacks in losing traditions. For example, almost all countries hide in traditions and attitudes the identity of their society and history. All features that have affected and characterized a country, define it by itself and shed light on cultural background. Typical cuisine or uncommon skills are in fact signs of historical events that have been cram for in something that just then became daily routine but that now risks to be definitely lost. Another reason to try to keep traditions alive, regards mostly special skills that have been maybe handed down through all generations and are deeply connected to some societies development. For example unique handicraft products obtained through secret techniques. On the other hand, we shouldn't oppose innovations and technologies, since they have become pivotal in modern society. The last developments, in fact, have strongly given many benefits as solving environmental crises, poverty, and for example have allowed to find cures of many diseases. As a result, many social issues have been dealt with. In conclusion, innovations have been fundamental and are still key points for the societies' development, we have to support them without renouncing to traditions and our historical background that defines our roots. Personally, I believe that we should find a balance to sustain both of them equally.
These days, in
developing countries
have
started
investing more on technology to
take part
in the worldwide trade. This innovative trend has,
of course
, blurred traditional
skills
and ways of life, losing relevant and historical signs of
societies
. I completely
agree
with the need to fight this dying out of
traditions
and in this essay I will support my opinion with examples.

There are several drawbacks in losing
traditions
.
For example
, almost all countries
hide
in
traditions
and attitudes the identity of their
society
and history. All features that have
affected
and characterized a country, define it by itself and shed light on cultural background. Typical cuisine or uncommon
skills
are in fact signs of historical
events
that have been
cram
for in something that
just
then became daily routine
but
that
now
risks to be
definitely lost.

Another reason to try to
keep
traditions
alive, regards
mostly
special
skills
that have been maybe handed down through all generations and are
deeply
connected to
some
societies
development.
For example
unique handicraft products obtained through secret techniques.

On the other hand
, we shouldn't oppose innovations and technologies, since they have become pivotal in modern
society
. The last developments, in fact, have
strongly
given
many
benefits as solving environmental crises, poverty, and
for example
have
allowed
to find
cures of
many
diseases.
As a result
,
many
social issues have
been dealt
with.

In conclusion
, innovations have been fundamental and are
still
key points for the societies' development, we
have to
support them without renouncing to
traditions
and our historical background that defines our roots.
Personally
, I believe that we should find a balance to sustain both of them
equally
.
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IELTS essay When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. with this opinion? v. 10

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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