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Visitors from other countries should imitate local customs and behaviours. Some people disagree; they think the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss the the two views and give your opinion. v.1

Visitors from other countries should imitate local customs and behaviours. Some people disagree; they think the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss the the two views and give your opinion. v. 1
It is an irrefutable fact that during travelling, there are lots of process people go through while entering such as customs and luggage checking. Some people assert that it is not fair like checking what people bring along with them. In my opinion, investigating process is not atrocious thing and in this essay, I intend to discuss both views before conclusion can be drawn. There are several reasons that why customs should check person luggage. Firstly, The trend of smuggling drugs from one nation to others is always on peak point. Because of this, folks trying to sell their drug in other places and earn money. For an example, In 2019, Around thousands of people caught in the airport during the checking procedure in all the world. Secondly, In some cases found that people steal some traditional stuff and put in the luggage which is illegal in every country, because some places do not allow take a secret product to other areas, such as sweets and so on. For an instance, In some countries having allergies from other traditional sweets, and that’s the main reason to follow these steps. In my prospective, the government should continue to follow these things, because we can stop illegal things and crime rate among people. Moreover, some things should need to be ignored, which seems not harmful to others. To put in a nutshell, I pen down and say that monitoring customs is a right agenda to stop such kind of outlawed things but up-to some extent.
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people
go through while entering such as customs and luggage checking.
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Some
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people
assert that it is not
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fair
like checking what
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people
bring along with them. In my opinion, investigating process is not atrocious thing and in this essay, I intend to discuss both views
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before
conclusion can
be drawn
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There are several reasons that why customs should
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check
person luggage.
Firstly
, The trend of smuggling drugs from one nation to others is always on peak point.
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, folks trying to sell their drug in
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other
places and earn money. For an example, In 2019, Around thousands of
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people
caught in the airport during the checking procedure in all the world.

Secondly
, In
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some
cases found that
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people
steal
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some
traditional stuff and put in the luggage which is illegal in every country,
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because
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some
places do not
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allow
take a secret product to
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other
areas, such as sweets and
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on. For an instance, In
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some
countries having allergies from
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other
traditional sweets, and that’s the main reason to follow these steps.

In my prospective, the
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government
should continue to follow these things,
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because
we can
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stop
illegal things and crime rate among
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people
.
Moreover
,
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some
things should need to be
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ignored
, which seems not harmful to others.

To put in a nutshell, I pen down and say that monitoring customs is a right agenda to
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stop
such kind of outlawed things
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but
up-to
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some
extent.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Visitors from other countries should imitate local customs and behaviours. Some people disagree; they think the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss the the two views and give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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