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what the activity iswhen you started doing itwhat you like about the activityand explain why this activity is important to you v. 1

Nowadays internet has become an important part of people’s lives. The majority of adults and children prefer home studying and working. This has both positive and negative sides, that’s why it’s a common debate topic. In my opinion advantages outweigh disadvantages, and in this essay I’m going to review both points. To start with, home-based education and working saves time. We spend more time with people we love and do things that we didn’t have time on. We don’t waste time on getting to work or school every day, it means we don’t use traffic which is an another great plus. For instance, the current situation with the coronavirus forced us to sit at home. As a result, the air over China, America and Europe has become cleaner, as well as water in muddy canals of Venice. On the contrary, working and studying at home has some disadvantages. One of them is the lack of communication and teamwork, which is bad for the society. For example, students at school have an interaction with peers, teachers and without that children can suffer loneliness. Another disadvantage is that at home we don’t value our time. Some children get bored and play video games or spend their time swimming in social media, which is bad not only for their health, but also on their development. To sum up I would like to say that this topic is controversial, has both negative and positive sides, so people should be able to balance between them.

IELTS essay what the activity iswhen you started doing itwhat you like about the activityand explain why this activity is important to you v.1

Nowadays internet has become an
important
part of
people
’s
lives
. The majority of adults and children prefer home studying and working. This has both
positive
and
negative
sides, that’s why it’s a common debate topic. In my opinion advantages outweigh disadvantages, and in this essay I’m going to review both points.

To
start
with, home-based education and working saves
time
. We spend more
time
with
people
we
love
and do things that we didn’t have
time
on. We don’t waste
time
on getting to work or school every day, it means we don’t
use
traffic which is
an another great
plus.
For instance
, the
current
situation with the coronavirus forced us to sit at home.
As a result
, the air over China, America and Europe has become cleaner,
as well
as water in muddy canals of Venice.

On the contrary
, working and studying at home has
some
disadvantages. One of them is the lack of communication and teamwork, which is
bad
for the society.
For example
, students at school have an interaction with peers, teachers and without that children can suffer loneliness. Another disadvantage is that at home we don’t value our
time
.
Some
children
get
bored and play video games or spend their
time
swimming in social media, which is
bad
not
only
for their health,
but
also
on their development.

To sum up I would like to say that this topic is controversial, has both
negative
and
positive
sides,
so
people
should be able to balance between them.
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