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University should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

University should be free for everyone. v. 1
It is considered that education should be free for everyone. I agree with this statement and below I am coming up with two significant reasons. It is common knowledge that providing students with higher education can give rise to a large number of positive effects for society. First, this is mainly because as long as students assimilate academy knowledge, they can a high chance to get a lucrative job, which can eliminate the problems associated with city and rural unemployment. Furthermore, it will lead to the development of the country as students will invent new innovations. For instance, a recent survey showed that those countries that have a better educated population via university have higher levels of innovation and productivity. Another reason why I believe education should be free is primarily because they are so expensive. To be more explicit, quite a bit of students from low income families cannot afford to study in university owning to their financial problems. Furthermore, a high cost of studying can give rise to taking a gap year and then in some cases, students don't want to return to a life of study after a year off. For example, a recent survey showed by the British Government found that 26% of students who take a gap-year never enter tertiary education. In conclusion, I am in support of making university free since they have quite a bit of positive effects to society and government.
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is considered
that education should be free for everyone. I
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agree
with this statement and below I am coming up with two significant reasons.

It is common knowledge that providing
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students
with higher education can give rise to
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a large number of
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positive
effects for society.
First
, this is
mainly
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because
as long as
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students
assimilate academy knowledge, they can a high chance to
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get
a lucrative job, which can eliminate the problems associated with city and rural unemployment.
Furthermore
, it will lead to the development of the country as
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students
will invent new innovations.
For instance
, a recent survey
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showed
that those countries that have a better educated population via university have higher levels of innovation and productivity.

Another reason why I believe education should be free is
primarily
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because
they are
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so
expensive. To be more explicit, quite a bit of
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students
from low income families cannot afford to study in university owning to their financial problems.
Furthermore
, a high cost of studying can give rise to taking a gap year and then in
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some
cases,
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students
don't want to return to a life of study after a year off.
For example
, a recent survey
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showed
by the British
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Government
found that 26% of
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students
who take a gap-year never enter tertiary education.

In conclusion
, I am in support of making university free since they have quite a bit of
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positive
effects to society and
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government
.
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IELTS essay University should be free for everyone. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
239 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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