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Describe a subject you enjoyed studying at school. You should say: When and where you started studying itWhat lessons were likeWhat made the subject different from other subjectsAnd explain why you enjoyed the subject v.2

Describe a subject you enjoyed studying at school. You should say: When and where you started studying itWhat lessons were likeWhat made the subject different from other subjectsAnd explain why you enjoyed the subject v. 2
In this day and age, ways of improving health have appeared to be a hotly debated issue in daily lives. However, the more advanced medical treatments are, the more expensive they seem to be, hence the poor cannot get access to modern medical services. Some people argue that both of the affluent and the poor should have the right to get medical treatments equally. Personally, I completely agree with this idea and believe that people’s access to proper health care should not depend on the level of their incomes. It is undeniable that middle and lower classes have taken more serious diseases than the upper one due to their lack of medical facilities, their shortage of health-related knowledge and especially exorbitant fees. Consequently, the current situation is mainly the wealthy, not the needy, can approach to the best medical treatments. This negative trend should be dealt with by letting the poor get access to advanced medical services. Furthermore, the main aim of inventing modern health care methods is improving people’s lives, and the mission of every hospital is to try their best to save and help their patients recover. Therefore, there should not have any discrimination against the poor during the curing process. This is not only the moral of a doctor, but also a humanitarian aspect. However, the question arises that where the money comes from to pay for medical treatments used for poor people. We cannot deny that nothing is free, but it will be cruel not to save a patient just because of their lack of money. Human life is precious and we must do all we can to save it. In my opinion, to answer this question, the government and the more wealthy can raise funds and set up non-profit organizations to help poor and disabled people in terms of health care. Such actions may make the scale of people suffering from common diseases decline significantly. In conclusion, I believe that protecting and improving health are so important that every citizen has the right to access modern medical achievements irrespective of their financial status.
In this day and age, ways of improving
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health
have appeared to be a
hotly
debated issue in daily
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lives
.
However
, the more advanced
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medical
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treatments
are, the more expensive they seem to be,
hence
the
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poor
cannot
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get
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access
to modern
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medical
services.
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Some
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people
argue that both of the affluent and the
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poor
should have the right to
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get
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medical
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treatments
equally
.
Personally
, I completely
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agree
with this
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idea
and believe that
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people’s
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access
to proper
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health
care should not depend on the level of their incomes.

It is undeniable that middle and lower classes have taken more serious diseases than the upper one due to their lack of
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medical
facilities, their shortage of health-related knowledge and
especially
exorbitant fees.
Consequently
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
situation is
mainly
the wealthy, not the needy, can approach to the best
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medical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
treatments
. This
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negative
trend should
be dealt
with by letting the
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poor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
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access
to advanced
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medical
services.

Furthermore
, the main aim of inventing modern
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health
care methods is improving
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people’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
, and the mission of every hospital is to try their best to save and
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help
their patients recover.
Therefore
, there should not have any discrimination against the
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poor
during the curing process. This is not
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only
the moral of a doctor,
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but
also
a humanitarian aspect.

However
, the question arises that where the money
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comes
from to pay for
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medical
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treatments
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used
for
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poor
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people
. We cannot deny that nothing is free,
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but
it will be cruel not to save a patient
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just
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because
of their lack of money. Human life is
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precious and
we
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must
do all we can to save it. In my opinion, to answer this question, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and the more wealthy can raise funds and set up non-profit organizations to
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help
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poor
and disabled
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people
in terms of
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health
care. Such actions may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the scale of
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people
suffering from common diseases decline
significantly
.

In conclusion
, I believe that protecting and improving
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health
are
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so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
that every citizen has the right to
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access
modern
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medical
achievements irrespective of their financial status.
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IELTS essay Describe a subject you enjoyed studying at school. You should say: When and where you started studying itWhat lessons were likeWhat made the subject different from other subjectsAnd explain why you enjoyed the subject v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
348 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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