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What kind of reading materials, such as novels, magazines, or poetry, do you most like to read in your free time? explain why you find this kind of reading material interesting? v.1

What kind of reading materials, such as novels, magazines, or poetry, do you most like to read in your free time? explain why you find this kind of reading material interesting? v. 1
Many people currently decide not to have babies when they are young and wait until they get older instead. There are some reasons for this tendency, and it could have some impacts on family life as well as society. To begin with, there are several reasons why a number of individuals want to have children later in their life. Firstly, this choice allows them to have more time to enjoy life when they are young. For instance, it is easier for a young couple to travel when they do not have a baby to nurture. Secondly, people who are at the early stage of their career usually have lower income compared to when they are older. Therefore, many people decide to start raising a family after having accumulated enough money to ensure a better life for their children. However, this tendency might bring about some negative effects on both family life and society. The first impact is that having children later will cause a significant age gap between two generations. This makes it harder for parents to understand and communicate with their offspring. Additionally, if people give birth when they are too old, the babies being born might be less physically healthy. This might adversely affect the quality of the future workforce if too many people decide to follow this trend. In conclusion, there are some reasons why many people prefer to have children later in their life, and this tendency can result in some negative impacts on both family life and society.
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people
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. There are
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reasons for this tendency, and it could have
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impacts on
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life
as well
as society.

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begin
with, there are several reasons why a number of individuals want to have children later in their
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life
.
Firstly
, this choice
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allows
them to have more time to enjoy
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life
when they are young.
For instance
, it is easier for a young couple to travel when they do not have a baby to nurture.
Secondly
,
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people
who are at the early stage of their career
usually
have lower income compared to when they are older.
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,
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people
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family
after having accumulated
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enough
money to ensure a better
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life
for their children.

However
, this tendency might bring about
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some
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negative
effects on both
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family
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life
and society. The
first
impact is that having children later will cause a significant age gap between two generations. This
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makes
it harder for parents to understand and communicate with their offspring.
Additionally
, if
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people
give birth when they are too
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old
, the babies
being born
might be less
physically
healthy. This might
adversely
affect the quality of the future workforce if too
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many
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people
decide to follow this trend.

In conclusion
, there are
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some
reasons why
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many
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people
prefer to have children later in their
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life
, and this tendency can result in
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some
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negative
impacts on both
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family
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life
and society.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay What kind of reading materials, such as novels, magazines, or poetry, do you most like to read in your free time? explain why you find this kind of reading material interesting? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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