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What kind of reading material, such as novels, magazines, or poetry, do you mostlike to read in your free time? Explain why you find this kind of reading materialinteresting. v.1

What kind of reading material, such as novels, magazines, or poetry, do you mostlike to read in your free time? Explain why you find this kind of reading materialinteresting. v. 1
Some people opine that children should learn how to be good members of society from school, whereas others feel this is the role of parents. This essay agrees that parents should teach children how to be good persons. Parents should teach children how to be a good person because they understand their children more than other people. In the family will have some unique family culture or activity that who are family member are known while others do not get it, also usually have many activities they do together which make it easier for parents to teach children. For example, when I was a little girl, my parents always taught me through the story at night about good thing which a nice person should have to do and what is the bad thing that I should not do. Even though children spend much time with a teacher for education, but children can spend time with their parents more. The parent has much time and many opportunities to teach their children because most schools accept children at age over three years old, in this period children have to stay at home and learn basic social skills from their parents. While children can go to school, they still stay with their parents after school, weekend and holiday. A parent can guide their children about something that happen on the way while they pick up children after school, it is easy to teach their children when a whole family stays at home on the weekend and they can suggest children be polite when meeting other people in the holiday trip. In conclusion, parents are a very important person who should teach children how to be good people.
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should learn how to be
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persons.

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how to be a
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good
person
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children
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culture or activity that who are
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spend much time with a teacher for education,
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more. The
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has much time and
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at age over three years
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children
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skills
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when a whole
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stays at home on the
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children
be polite when meeting
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in the holiday trip.

In conclusion
,
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parents
are a
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person who should
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how to be
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.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay What kind of reading material, such as novels, magazines, or poetry, do you mostlike to read in your free time? Explain why you find this kind of reading materialinteresting. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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