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What kind of qualities should a good leader possess？Please state youropinion and give specific details and examples in your explanation. v.1

What kind of qualities should a good leader possess？Please state youropinion and give specific details and examples in your explanation. v. 1
Have you ever thought that incoming products from foreign countries is good for our economic growth or not? In my point of view, we should import things that we cannot produce by ourselves to satisfy people wants and needs. Nowadays, people trade things with money to get what they wants and needs to make them more comfortable and fulfil their heart with things that they love. So, people start to learn how to sell products and strategies to gain more profit as much as they can also the country. The government needs to increase the percentages of gross domestic product (GDP) to make the business in the country run well and get enough money to pay an expenditure for the whole country. Supermarkets are the most centre that might help government to gain more money by include taxes to products that they sell because people spend their money for food or even the asset which is essential for their lives. Moreover, if we import products that customer wants and needs, but we cannot produce by ourselves, the taxes of incoming product with a higher rate will make government has more income. Furthermore, people will spend their money for things they want especially for limited products and brand name, what will come after is revolving funds in the country and has a very strong economy. For instance, fans of Gucci really want to update their accessaries and buy the limited one. On the other hand, it might be a bit disadvantages such as, when people spend too much on imports products and ignore or did not support our own product enough so they will lose their income but, if we promote and people cooperate, we can solve this problem. To conclude, import product will increase peoples' incomes and beneficial to the government to earn more taxes. In my opinion, I think imports are more helpful to our economy than disadvantages and that is why I agree with this opinion.
Have you ever
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that incoming
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products
from foreign
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countries
is
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good
for our economic growth or not? In my point of view, we should
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import
things that we cannot produce by ourselves to satisfy
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people
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wants
and needs.

Nowadays,
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people
trade things with
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money
to
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get
what they
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wants
and needs to
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make
them more comfortable and fulfil their heart with things that they
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love
.
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So
,
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people
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start
to learn how to sell
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products
and strategies to gain more profit as much as they can
also
the
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country
. The
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government
needs to increase the percentages of gross domestic
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product
(GDP) to
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make
the business in the
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country
run well and
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get
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enough
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money
to pay an expenditure for the whole
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country
. Supermarkets are the most
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centre
that might
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help
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government
to gain more
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money
by include taxes to
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products
that they sell
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because
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people
spend their
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money
for food or even the asset which is essential for their
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lives
.

Moreover
, if we
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import
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products
that customer
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wants
and needs,
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but
we cannot produce by ourselves, the taxes of incoming
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product
with a higher rate will
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make
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government
has more income.
Furthermore
,
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people
will spend their
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money
for things they
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want
especially
for limited
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products
and brand name, what will
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come
after is revolving funds in the
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country
and has a
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very
strong economy.
For instance
, fans of Gucci
really
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want
to update their
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accessaries
and
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buy
the limited one.

On the other hand
, it might be a
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disadvantages such as, when
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people
spend too much on
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imports
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products
and
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ignore
or did not support our
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own
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product
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enough
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so
they will lose their income
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but
, if we promote and
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people
cooperate, we can solve this problem.

To conclude
,
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import
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product
will increase peoples' incomes and beneficial to the
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government
to earn more taxes. In my opinion, I
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think
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imports
are more helpful to our economy than disadvantages and
that is
why I
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agree
with this opinion.
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41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay What kind of qualities should a good leader possess？Please state youropinion and give specific details and examples in your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
328 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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