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One should live a relaxed life instead of always hurrying. Do you agree ordisagree which the above statement? Why or why nor? Use specific reasonsand examples to support your answer. v.1

One should live a relaxed life instead of always hurrying. Why or why nor? Use specific reasonsand examples to support your answer. v. 1
Certainly, games are as important as tertiary education. Educational institutions should impart equal significance to both to remain their status. I will narrate the points in the favour of other activities in the following paragraphs. Undoubtedly, academic study is the utmost aspect of life of immense people to attain a job with handsome remuneration. However, sports could be a superior way to obtain all amenities. Therefore, universities should invest some amount of money in the sports activities. Secondly, it is fruitful to enhance the reputation of the college, among other colleges in the particular area. For instance, DAV university is well known because they are providing not only bookish knowledge but also giving opportunities to the students to participate in games and other activities. Thirdly, many students are keenly interested in sports, which they can pursue at the college and can give their best with the help of funds given by the university authorities. On the other hand, libraries play vital role in the student's life. It is useful to get extra books or to read newspapers and collect the information on some topics. At least one library must be in the school, college, academy. Moreover, pupils can be updated by visiting in because every news come in this and easily accessible for everyone. In a nutshell, although libraries have crucial elements in education. Nevertheless, educational institution's operators should give tantamount to sports to keep its value.
Certainly
, games are as
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important
as tertiary education. Educational institutions should impart equal significance to both to remain their status. I will narrate the points in the
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favour
of
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other
activities in the following paragraphs.

Undoubtedly
, academic study is the utmost aspect of life of immense
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to attain a job with handsome remuneration.
However
,
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sports
could be a superior way to obtain all amenities.
Therefore
, universities should invest
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
amount of money in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
activities.
Secondly
, it is fruitful to enhance the reputation of the college, among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
colleges in the particular area.
For instance
, DAV university is well known
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they are providing not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
bookish knowledge
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but
also
giving opportunities to the students to participate in games and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
activities.
Thirdly
,
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many
students are
keenly
interested in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
, which they can pursue at the college and can give their best with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of funds
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
by the university authorities.

On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand, libraries play vital role in the student's life. It is useful to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
extra books or to read newspapers and collect the information on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
topics. At least one library
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be in the school, college, academy.
Moreover
, pupils can
be updated
by visiting in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
every news
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
in this and
easily
accessible for everyone.

In a nutshell, although libraries have crucial elements in education.
Nevertheless
, educational institution's operators should give tantamount to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
its value.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay One should live a relaxed life instead of always hurrying. Why or why nor? Use specific reasonsand examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
237 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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