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What is the most efficient type of transportation in your country? Explain why you think it is efficient. Include specific reasons or examples. v.1

What is the most efficient type of transportation in your country? Explain why you think it is efficient. Include specific reasons or examples. v. 1
Cleaning is among the most important things that people care about. Nowadays, some people believe that keep the house and the workplace tidy is very essential and beneficial. This essay will argue why houses and offices should be well organized and neat and clean. On the one hand, people prefer to keep their houses and workplaces in good condition because it creates a healthy and safe atmosphere for all the family members and children in particular. Cleanliness also considered vital to maintaining a healthy life. For instance, research in Australia shows that people who work in tidy offices are healthier and more fit than those who work in an inappropriate environment. So, it is necessary to keep workplaces and houses clean and tidy. On the other hand, it is not essential to keep all the things in their appropriate place because it is habitual that someone places his belongings to that place where he can easily find all these things. Although a tidy environment improves people’s moods and behaviour, some people prefer to place their things in an easily accessible place. For example, in Japan, 78 percent of males kept their car keys to that place where they can easily remind them. Moreover, an individual’s choice is vital. Cleanliness has become a hotly debated issue around the globe. Tidy and clean workplaces grab the attention of more employees because everyone wants to work in a clean and healthy environment so that he can avoid diseases. Also, some people have no problem with the messy arrangement of files, keys, and other important documents in houses, especially at offices. In my opinion, people should pay attention to make their houses and workplaces as well-organized, tidy and favourable.
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important
things that
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people
care about. Nowadays,
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some
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people
believe that
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keep
the
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house
and the
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workplace
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tidy
is
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very
essential and beneficial. This essay will argue why
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houses
and offices should be well organized and neat and clean.

On the one hand,
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people
prefer to
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keep
their
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houses
and
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workplaces
in
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good
condition
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because
it creates a healthy and safe atmosphere for all the family members and children
in particular
. Cleanliness
also
considered vital to maintaining a healthy life.
For instance
, research in Australia
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shows
that
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people
who work in
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tidy
offices are healthier and
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more fit
than those who work in an inappropriate environment.
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So
, it is necessary to
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keep
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workplaces
and
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houses
clean and tidy.

On the other hand
, it is not essential to
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keep
all the things in their appropriate
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place
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because
it is habitual that someone
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places
his belongings to that
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place
where he can
easily
find all these things. Although a
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tidy
environment
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improves
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people’s
moods and
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behaviour
,
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some
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people
prefer to
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place
their things in an
easily
accessible
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place
.
For example
, in Japan, 78 percent of males
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kept
their car keys to that
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place
where they can
easily
remind them.
Moreover
, an individual’s choice is vital.

Cleanliness has become a
hotly
debated issue around the globe.
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Tidy
and clean
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workplaces
grab the attention of more employees
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because
everyone wants to work in a clean and healthy environment
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so
that he can avoid diseases.
Also
,
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some
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people
have no problem with the messy arrangement of files, keys, and other
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important
documents in
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houses
,
especially
at offices. In my opinion,
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people
should pay attention to
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make
their
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houses
and
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workplaces
as well
-organized,
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tidy
and
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favourable
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay What is the most efficient type of transportation in your country? Explain why you think it is efficient. Include specific reasons or examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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