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Sometimes spouses have to live far away from each other. Maintaining a long distance relationship is sometimes difficult and straining. What do you think are the main reasons of long distance relationships? What can be done to help couples feel closer? v.2

Sometimes spouses have to live far away from each other. Maintaining a long distance relationship is sometimes difficult and straining. What do you think are the main reasons of long distance relationships? What can be done to help couples feel closer? v. 2
In recent years, a myriad of cultural aspects has been included in movies as a method to engage the audiences. Although broadcasting foreign films and TV shows is the benefit of a country's culture, producing local films and shows also play an important role in the culture of a country. There are a variety of reasons why a country should encourage foreign filmography. First, it would emphasize the distinguishable aspects of the host country’s culture. For example, by broadcasting movies with cultural diversity, viewers could identify the differences of their culture and other countries’ culture, which make it conducive for them to recognize the beauty of their own culture. Second, it is an opportunity for the audience to spot and fix the inappropriate aspects remaining in their culture. Therefore, their culture would be more viable in modern days. It is clear that by producing local films and TV show, the culture of the country will be greatly promoted. Firstly, if the director successfully includes the beauty of the country’s culture in a film, the audience will be notified and be proud of their culture. For instance, in several Vietnamese movies, the image of Ao Dai, a Vietnamese traditional garment, is usually used, which evokes patriotism and reminds the audience the beauty of their people and land. Secondly, this approach can acknowledge viewers of seemingly forgotten cultural aspect, but has been vitally important in one’s life. As a result, the audience would acknowledge the symbols indicated in the movies and thus conserving it and passing it to the next generation. In conclusion, encourage foreign films could benefit the country culture in a variety of ways while making movies about the country’s culture could also be an effective way to remind the audience of the value of their culture.
In recent years, a myriad of cultural
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been included
in
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movies
as a method to engage the
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audiences
. Although broadcasting foreign films and TV
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shows
is the benefit of a country's
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culture
, producing local films and
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shows
also
play an
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important
role in the
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culture
of a country.

There are a variety of reasons why a
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country
should encourage foreign filmography.
First
, it would emphasize the distinguishable
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aspects
of the host
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country’s
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culture
.
For example
, by broadcasting
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movies
with cultural diversity, viewers could identify the differences of their
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culture
and other
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countries’
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culture
, which
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make
it conducive for them to recognize the beauty of their
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own
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culture
. Second, it is an opportunity for the
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audience
to spot and
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fix
the inappropriate
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aspects
remaining in their
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culture
.
Therefore
, their
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culture
would be more viable in modern days.

It is
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clear
that by producing local films and TV
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show
, the
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culture
of the
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country
will be
greatly
promoted.
Firstly
, if the director
successfully
includes the beauty of the
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country’s
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culture
in a film, the
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audience
will
be notified
and be proud of their
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culture
.
For instance
, in several Vietnamese
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movies
, the image of
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Ao
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Dai
, a Vietnamese traditional garment, is
usually
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used
, which evokes patriotism and reminds the
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audience
the beauty of their
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people
and land.
Secondly
, this approach can acknowledge viewers of
seemingly
forgotten cultural
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aspect
,
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but
has been
vitally
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important
in one’s life.
As a result
, the
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audience
would acknowledge the symbols indicated in the
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movies
and
thus
conserving it and passing it to the
next
generation.

In conclusion
, encourage foreign films could benefit the
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country
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culture
in a variety of ways while making
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movies
about the
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country’s
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culture
could
also
be an effective way to remind the
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audience
of the value of their
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culture
.
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36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Sometimes spouses have to live far away from each other. Maintaining a long distance relationship is sometimes difficult and straining. What do you think are the main reasons of long distance relationships? What can be done to help couples feel closer? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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