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What in your opinion, has been the single most important scientific or technologycal development of the last fifty years? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v.1

What in your opinion, has been the single most important scientific or technologycal development of the last fifty years? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 1
It is common that many conventional techniques and lifestyles gradually disappeared due to the modern technology. Some people agree that it is useless to keep them alive. I personally agree it under certain condition; however, I opine that it is important to carry on conventional skills for future generations and the essay will discuss my view. To begin with, firstly, customary skills and old fashioned lifestyles may be outdated due to the introduction of modern devices; however, they are extremely valuable for human beings' civilization histories. Moreover, some traditional skills such as cooking, guarding, sewing, and so on are essential for people to master as survival skills. Despite that the advance in agricultural and industrial sectors provides all daily life items to meet inhabitants' demand, learning customary skills and living old fashioned lifestyle will provide a chance for  the youth to learn human history. Finally, certain traditional skills are considered as part of religious activities. For example, printing is essential in all economic sectors; however, traditional Chinese writing and painting are still many Chinese's favours and many Chinese are fond of practicing them. Many customary skills provide profound economic opportunities to earn money as well. However, some traditional skills should be allowed to disappear in terms of social selection because some of them may cause negative impacts on human societies. For instance, raising poultries in inner cities may put inhabitants' health at risk to catch infectious diseases, cooking with wood in inner cities may worsen air pollution, and riding horses in the road will disturb the traffic system on the roads. As a result, some conventional skills or old fashioned lifestyles should be allowed to disappear. In conclusion, the advance of technology provides novel and modern products to guide inhabitants to have a better life. Meanwhile, conventional skills and old fashioned lifestyles may not play the same role in the contemporary era as in the past. Some of them still are precious content in our societies due to the above reasons. Therefore, keeping them alive will  be precious gifts from our descendants in order to have a better understanding of our ancestors.
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techniques and
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lifestyles
gradually
disappeared due to the modern technology.
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people
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agree
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keep
them alive. I
personally
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agree
it under certain condition;
however
, I opine that it is
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important
to carry on
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conventional
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skills
for future generations and the essay will discuss my view.

To
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begin
with,
firstly
, customary
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skills
and
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old
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fashioned
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lifestyles
may
be outdated
due to the introduction of modern devices;
however
, they are
extremely
valuable for human beings' civilization histories.
Moreover
,
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some
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traditional
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skills
such as cooking, guarding, sewing, and
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so
on are essential for
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people
to master as survival
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skills
. Despite that the advance in agricultural and industrial sectors
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provides
all daily life items to
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meet
inhabitants' demand, learning customary
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skills
and living
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old
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fashioned
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lifestyle
will
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provide
a chance for
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the youth to learn human history.
Finally
, certain
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traditional
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skills
are considered
as part of religious activities.
For example
, printing is essential in all economic sectors;
however
,
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traditional
Chinese writing and painting are
still
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many
Chinese's
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favours
and
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many
Chinese are fond of practicing them.
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customary
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skills
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provide
profound economic opportunities to earn money
as well
.

However
,
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skills
should be
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allowed
to disappear in terms of social selection
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because
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some
of them may cause
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negative
impacts on human societies.
For instance
, raising
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poultries
in inner cities may put inhabitants' health at
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risk
to catch infectious diseases, cooking with wood in inner cities may worsen air pollution, and riding horses in the road will disturb the traffic system on the roads.
As a result
,
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some
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conventional
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skills
or
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fashioned
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lifestyles
should be
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allowed
to disappear.

In conclusion
, the advance of technology
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provides
novel and modern products to guide inhabitants to have a better life. Meanwhile,
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conventional
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skills
and
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old
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fashioned
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lifestyles
may not play the same role in the contemporary era as in the past.
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Some
of them
still
are precious content in our societies due to the above reasons.
Therefore
, keeping them alive will
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be precious gifts from our descendants in order to have a better understanding of our ancestors.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay What in your opinion, has been the single most important scientific or technologycal development of the last fifty years? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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