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Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. v.2

Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world? v. 2
The wearing of school uniforms is an issue that is both supported and opposed by many people. Numerous schools around the world require students to wear school uniforms on their grounds, however, teachers are not often required to wear a specific uniform while working. It has therefore been suggested that it should be compulsory for teachers to wear a specific uniform or follow a specific dress code on a daily basis. One reason for introducing a dress code for teachers would be that teachers typically function as role models. For students who are not willing to conform to the dress code of their school, it would be beneficial to see figures of authority wearing the same outfit as each other, and they would then potentially be more willing to follow their own dress code. Another reason for introducing a compulsory dress code for teachers would be that if all teachers wore the same outfit, there would be no visible difference amongst them. Naturally, some teachers are wealthier than others and would tend to show this through their clothing. This could cause other teachers to feel inferior and therefore could result in lower quality work and decreased motivation. Furthermore, students would feel treated more fairly, if not only they, but teachers as well had to wear a certain uniform in school. Lastly, uniforms for teachers would enable students and other teachers to easily distinguish between school staff and other adults. In many schools there is no high quality security system and strangers can easily enter and steal something or commit other crimes. If teachers wore uniforms, one would then be able to approach and confront strangers more easily, as one could distinguish teachers wearing uniforms clearly from other adults. In conclusion, there are many positive effects of introducing uniforms for teachers, and therefore in my opinion, they should be installed in as many schools as possible.
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on their grounds,
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are not
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a specific
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while working. It has
therefore
been suggested
that it should be compulsory for
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to
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a specific
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or follow a specific
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code on a daily basis.

One reason for introducing a
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code for
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would be that
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typically
function as role models. For
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who are not willing to conform to the
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code of their
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, it would be beneficial to
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, and they would then
potentially
be more willing to follow their
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Another reason for introducing a compulsory
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would be that if all
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wore the same outfit, there would be no visible difference amongst them.
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are wealthier than others and would tend to
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show
this through their clothing. This could cause
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to feel inferior and
therefore
could result in lower quality work and decreased motivation.
Furthermore
,
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would feel treated more
fairly
, if not
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in school.

Lastly
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staff and
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there is no high quality security system and strangers can
easily
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other
crimes. If
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wore
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uniforms
, one would then be able to approach and confront strangers more
easily
, as one could distinguish
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teachers
wearing
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clearly
from
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other
adults.

In conclusion
, there are
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positive
effects of introducing
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for
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, and
therefore
in my opinion, they should
be installed
in as
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as possible.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
315 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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