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Some people believe that children nowadays have too much freedom. Others believe that children are protected too much by their parents. Which of these statements do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your decision. v.1

Some people believe that children nowadays have too much freedom. Others believe that children are protected too much by their parents. Which of these statements do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your decision. v. 1
Art is a diverse range of creative activities that express the creators’ imaginations. Naturally, anyone can assume, to create art all you need is a good imagination. However, some others believe that you need to learn special skills to become an artist. This essay shall discuss both the views in detail. Any person with a creative vision and ingenuity can create art forms such as writing poetry, painting, or composing a song or two. Drawing up a mental picture of your feelings and expressing them effectively on paper will make you an artist. For example, some people are sometimes driven by longing or grief for someone, which makes them spill their feelings out in a song or a painting. This is why people feel that creating art is not that hard and can be attempted easily. On the contrary, there are people who firmly opine that without learning how to express creatively, imagination alone cannot help one become an artist. It requires years of training for people to become great artists. To become a musician for instance, one needs to learn all the fundamentals of rhythms and melodies; to play a guitar one needs to learn all the right chords. It doesn’t help if your imagination is vivid; you need to know the correct technique of expressing the same to distinguish your creation from the ordinary mediocrities. To conclude, I’d like to say that as easy as it sounds, creating art is definitely not a piece of cake. Sure, one might be innate in some art forms, but enhancing that skill is very important to create masterpieces.
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is a diverse range of creative activities that express the creators’
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imaginations
.
Naturally
, anyone can assume, to create
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art
all you
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need
is a
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good
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imagination
.
However
,
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some
others believe that you
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need
to learn special
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skills
to
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become
an
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artist
. This essay shall discuss both the views in detail.

Any person with a creative vision and ingenuity can create
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art
forms such as writing poetry, painting, or composing a song or two. Drawing up a mental picture of your feelings and expressing them
effectively
on paper will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
you an
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artist
.
For example
,
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some
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people
are
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sometimes
driven by longing or grief for someone, which
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makes
them spill their feelings out in a song or a painting. This is why
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people
feel that creating
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art
is not that
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hard
and can
be attempted
easily
.

On the contrary
, there are
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people
who
firmly
opine that without learning how to express
creatively
,
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imagination
alone cannot
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one
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. It requires years of training for
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people
to
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become
great
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artists
. To
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a musician
for instance
, one
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needs
to learn all the fundamentals of rhythms and melodies; to play a guitar one
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needs
to learn all the right chords. It doesn’t
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help
if your
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imagination
is vivid; you
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need
to know the correct technique of expressing the same to distinguish your creation from the ordinary mediocrities.

To conclude
, I’d like to say that as easy as it sounds, creating
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art
is definitely not a piece of cake. Sure, one might be innate in
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some
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art
forms,
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enhancing that
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skill
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to create masterpieces.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that children nowadays have too much freedom. Others believe that children are protected too much by their parents. Which of these statements do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your decision. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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