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What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? v. 1
One of the most conspicuous trends of today’s world is a colossal upsurge in considering that sports like football can ease international tensions. I somewhat agree with the statement and upon the fact that this matter has some convincing arguments despite the contentions about it. This essay will discuss how sporting events allow people to release their patriotic emotions and can also have adverse effects and thus will lead to the conclusion. At the outset, there are some reasons how popular events can have some negative effects, but the most alarming one lies in the fact that these major events can escalate international relations and this can create more problems between nations. For instance, during the 2018 FIFA world cup Britain and united states refused to attend the world cup final held in Russia. In result, Russia has imposed sanctions on ally countries of Britain and the united states. For this reason, the adverse impacts of the popular events should not be ignored. Nevertheless, I strongly believe that sporting events can be addressed with some positive facets as well. However, the most predominant one stems from the fact that these events bring people together, which in results ease international tensions and leads towards peaceful relations. As an illustration, the findings of some studies reveal that the best way to ease international tensions is organising sporting events. Therefore, the importance of the football world cup and other sports are undeniable. After analysing the above discussion, it can be concluded that the impact of sporting events is significant, although the given negative effects should not be overlooked.
One of the most conspicuous trends of
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today
’s
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world
is a colossal upsurge in considering that sports like football can
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ease
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international
tensions. I somewhat
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agree
with the statement and upon the fact that this matter has
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some
convincing arguments despite the contentions about it. This essay will discuss how sporting
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events
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allow
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people
to release their patriotic emotions and can
also
have adverse effects and
thus
will lead to the conclusion.

At the outset, there are
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some
reasons how popular
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events
can have
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some
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negative
effects,
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but
the most alarming one lies in the fact that these major
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events
can escalate
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international
relations and this can create more problems between nations.
For instance
, during the 2018 FIFA
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world
cup Britain and
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united states
refused to attend the
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world
cup final held in Russia. In result, Russia has imposed sanctions on
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ally
countries of Britain and the
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united states
.
For this reason
, the adverse impacts of the popular
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events
should not be
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ignored
.

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, I
strongly
believe that sporting
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events
can
be addressed
with
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some
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positive
facets
as well
.
However
, the most predominant one stems from the fact that these
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events
bring
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people
together, which in results
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ease
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international
tensions and leads towards peaceful relations. As an illustration, the findings of
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some
studies reveal that the best way to
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ease
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international
tensions is
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organising
sporting
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events
.
Therefore
, the importance of the football
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world
cup and other sports are undeniable.

After
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analysing
the above discussion, it can
be concluded
that the impact of sporting
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events
is significant, although the
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given
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negative
effects should not
be overlooked
.
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IELTS essay What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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