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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages? v.33

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages? v. 33
The sources of social media are changing and spreading rapidly as compared to the past. Editors play a pivotal role to modify the news and then publish it through different means under pressures of political powers and other bodies. I think, we should be aware about all types of news and if they broadcasted only good news, which gives us happiness and positivity, then, we will be unconscious about violent activities and may be resulted harmful in prospective. News sources such as internet, newspaper or television is a mirror to the society about daily happenings, but nowadays with the advancement of technology news editors use editing before publishing the hunk or broadcast on any news channel. In this way, they hide half part of truth from audiences or readers under the pressure of political powers, corrupt, illegal bodies or government authorities, which affects individuals as well as prospective generations because they will be unaware about the truth. To take an example, If any newspaper published, health portion with inappropriate knowledge, then it affects the readers of this specimen, when they apply it on themselves and face negative results. Moreover, everyone should be habitual to read a mixture of bad and good news because cruel news provides us eventual lessons and precautions, to do not let them happen and be totally conscious. To illustrate it, if a player, read an example or watch a news on television about any injury happened to the player, then he or she will be forthcoming ready to tackle with such kind of situation in subsequent and in opposition of it if he see the good news that will encourage him to do well with boosting power. Eventually good news will be no more beneficial because news becomes a middle man between individuals of society and circumstances of the nation, so the news should be clear and true without any editing in truths. Thus, it does not matter, it is good or bad, that all will be reported and published without any pressure of political or any other power. To sum up, Editors play an appreciable role to modify and summarize the news, but they should not hide any truth and broadcast all sorts of news without any discrimination.
The sources of social media are changing and spreading
rapidly
as compared to the past. Editors play a pivotal role to modify the
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news
and then publish it through
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different
means under pressures of political powers and other bodies. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
, we should be aware about all types of
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news
and if they broadcasted
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
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good
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news
, which gives us happiness and positivity, then, we will be unconscious about violent activities and may
be resulted
harmful in prospective.

News sources such as internet, newspaper or television is a mirror to the society about daily happenings,
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but
nowadays with the advancement of technology
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news
editors
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use
editing
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before
publishing the hunk or broadcast on any
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news
channel. In this way, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hide
half part of
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truth
from audiences or readers under the pressure of political powers, corrupt, illegal bodies or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
authorities, which affects individuals
as well
as prospective generations
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because
they will be unaware about the
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truth
. To take an example, If any newspaper published, health portion with inappropriate knowledge, then it affects the readers of this specimen, when they apply it on themselves and face
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
results.

Moreover
, everyone should be habitual to read a mixture of
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bad
and
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good
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news
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because
cruel
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news
provides us eventual lessons and precautions, to do not
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let
them happen and be
totally
conscious. To illustrate it, if a player, read an example or
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watch
a
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news
on television about any injury happened to the player, then he or she will be forthcoming ready to tackle with such kind of situation in subsequent and in opposition of it if he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "sees", "saw".
see
the
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good
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news
that will encourage him to do well with boosting power.

Eventually
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good
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news
will be no more beneficial
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because
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news
becomes a middle
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man
between individuals of society and circumstances of the nation,
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so
the
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news
should be
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clear
and true without any editing in
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truths
.
Thus
, it does not matter, it is
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good
or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
, that all will
be reported
and published without any pressure of political or any other power.

To sum up, Editors play an appreciable role to modify and summarize the
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news
,
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but
they should not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hide
any
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truth
and broadcast all sorts of
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news
without any discrimination.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
To learn a language is to have one more window from which to look at the world.
Chinese Proverb

IELTS essay Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages? v. 33

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
373 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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