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What are your career aspirations upon graduation of the degree-program? Please describe, how are you going to secure these your career-goals? How do you see your career to progress over the next five years? v.1

What are your career aspirations upon graduation of the degree-program? Please describe, how are you going to secure these your career-goals? How do you see your career to progress over the next five years? v. 1
Learning is really important to me. I want to continue learning techniques that will make me a better leader and researcher. That is why I am so excited by the opportunity to work alongside the experts at this company. As I mature as a professional- I hope to take over a leadership role for the next generation of analytical researchers at the company. Eventually I would love to take my researching skills to the application side of the business. For me- making that move indicates I will be able to use everything I learned throughout my education and career to make new innovations. As my study and experience background was solely related to financial services for an organization. During this time, I've enjoyed my work in facing day to day challenges and am looking to specialize in the entrepreneurship program from the university, which has a large range of project working on different sectors of the community. Ultimately, maybe 3 - 5 years down the road, I would love to direct a leadership operation at a major company. I would like to expand my horizons by jumping in feet first and learning as much as I can, as quickly as I can, with the organization. From there, I would seek out opportunities — at least one to two a year — to expand my knowledge through training and educational opportunities to support my job. I would love to participate in at least one project geared toward leadership training, if the opportunity arises. I also understand that the organization has a strong volunteer team, and I would like to be an active participant of that team, as well. At some point, I would also like to be considered for a supervisory or management level role. "
Learning is
really
important
to me. I want to continue learning techniques that will
make
me a better leader and researcher.
That is
why I am
so
excited by the
opportunity
to work alongside the experts at this
company
. As I mature as a professional- I hope to take over a leadership role for the
next
generation of analytical researchers at the
company
.
Eventually
I would
love
to take my researching
skills
to the application side of the business. For me- making that
move
indicates I will be able to
use
everything I learned throughout my education and career to
make
new innovations.

As my study and experience background was
solely
related to financial services for an organization. During this time, I've enjoyed my work in facing day to day challenges and
am
looking to specialize in the entrepreneurship program from the university, which has a large range of project working on
different
sectors of the community.
Ultimately
, maybe
3 - 5
years down the road, I would
love
to direct a leadership operation at a major
company
.

I would like to expand my horizons by jumping in feet
first
and learning as much as I can, as
quickly
as I can, with the organization. From there, I would seek out
opportunities
— at least one to two a year — to expand my knowledge through training and educational
opportunities
to support my job. I would
love
to participate in at least one project geared toward leadership training, if the
opportunity
arises. I
also
understand that the organization has a strong volunteer team, and I would like to be an active participant of that team,
as well
. At
some
point, I would
also
like to
be considered
for a supervisory or management level role.
"
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay What are your career aspirations upon graduation of the degree-program? Please describe, how are you going to secure these your career-goals? How do you see your career to progress over the next five years? v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
294 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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