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some people think that the study of history is of little use to us. others believe that studying history help us to know the present. discuss the both view and give your opinion. v.1

some people think that the study of history is of little use to us. others believe that studying history help us to know the present. discuss the both view and give your opinion. v. 1
In the salad days of the millennium the society is polarized into two groups almost equally regarding the notion that the study of history has been overlooked in modern days of life. Since, people believed that history is not a much useful as a science and research. On the other hand, history will help us to predict the future by involving activities on current affairs. The following paragraph would shed light on both approaches before making final note. To commence with first notion, there are numerous things to be shared in its favour. First and foremost, history will increase awareness of our culture which was developed in past decades. For example, by evolving in historical events people can learn and understand the story behind this same. Secondly, developed business strategies and make a good relationship with different organization and also enhances the new ideas for achievement or success to live a fruitful life. As a result, people worth and prestige would be increased in society. Shifting towards the second school of thought, history will help us for a creating a better world in terms of science, innovation and new researches. To put it briefly, people have to gave a contribution in the past because aware of dangers in present scenario. . Moreover, history will gave a mirror view of our economic growth and also help to understand people thinking changed in over the past ten years. Hammering the last nail, i personally believed that history plays wider role in our development of science and innovations which has beneficial to humans. So, overall it can crystal clear say that ancient times have great significance in our modern day of life.
In the salad days of the millennium the society
is polarized
into two groups almost
equally
regarding the notion that the study of
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history
has
been overlooked
in modern days of life. Since,
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people
believed that
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history
is not
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a much
useful as a science and research.
On the other hand
,
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history
will
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help
us to predict the future by involving activities on
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current
affairs. The following paragraph would shed light on both approaches
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before
making final note.

To commence with
first
notion, there are numerous things to
be shared
in its
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favour
.
First
and foremost,
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history
will increase awareness of our culture which
was developed
in past decades.
For example
, by evolving in historical
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events
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people
can learn and understand the story behind this same.
Secondly
, developed business strategies and
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make
a
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good
relationship with
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different
organization and
also
enhances the new
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ideas
for achievement or success to
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live
a fruitful life.
As a result
,
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people
worth and prestige would
be increased
in society.

Shifting towards the second school of
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thought
,
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history
will
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help
us for a creating a better world in terms of science, innovation and new researches. To put it
briefly
,
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people
have
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to gave
a contribution in the past
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because
aware of
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dangers
in present scenario.
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.
Moreover
,
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history
will gave a mirror view of our economic growth and
also
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help
to understand
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people
thinking
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changed
in over the past ten years.

Hammering the last nail,
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i
personally
believed that
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history
plays wider role in our development of science and innovations which has beneficial to humans.
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So
,
overall
it
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can crystal
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clear
say that ancient times have great significance in our modern day of life.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that the study of history is of little use to us. others believe that studying history help us to know the present. discuss the both view and give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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