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Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to secure a good job. Others believe that employers value work experience more than a university degree. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to secure a good job. Others believe that employers value work experience more than a university degree. v. 2
These days, securing a job has become increasingly challenging. A few people believe that the best way to get a job is by acquiring a university degree. In contrast to this, others agree that it's the work experience that matters more. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to the university degree is more essential to get into the workforce. Work experience helps to expertise in the Job. It makes one confident about his work and makes them error free. For instance, people who have a history of experience are more positive about their decision making skills and taking in charge. This is possible only if you are well versed with the job. Therefore, working before will definitely help in boosting your self esteem and makes it easier to climb corporateladder. On the other hand, certain people are of the opinion, along with me that a University degree shows the knowledge, that the student possesses for the specific job. University education lays a foundation and fosters understanding different subjects that are required before entering a company. For example, a university graduate would definitely ace an interview during placements which is regarding his subject rather than a non graduate. This is because, he has a better grasp on those topics which have been taught to him before. Therefore, it's very crucial that a person has an overview about what the job would require before stepping into it. To summarize, people have argued whether a university degree is more important than work experience. I firmly believe that, university degree plays a bigger role than work experience as each and everyone should know the basics before entering into their respective jobs.
These days, securing a
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job
has become
increasingly
challenging. A few
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people
believe that the best way to
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get
a
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job
is by acquiring a
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university
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degree
.
In contrast
to this, others
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agree
that it's the
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work
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experience
that matters more. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to the
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university
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degree
is more essential to
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get
into the workforce.

Work
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experience
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helps
to expertise in the
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Job
. It
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makes
one confident about his
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work
and
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makes
them error free.
For instance
,
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people
who have a history of
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experience
are more
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positive
about their
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decision making
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skills
and taking in charge. This is possible
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only
if you are well versed with the
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job
.
Therefore
, working
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before
will definitely
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help
in boosting your
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self esteem
and
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makes
it easier to climb
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corporateladder
.

On the other hand
, certain
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people
are of the opinion, along with me that a
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University
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degree
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shows
the knowledge, that the student possesses for the specific
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job
.
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University
education lays a foundation and fosters understanding
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different
subjects that
are required
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before
entering a
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company
.
For example
, a
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university
graduate would definitely ace an interview during placements which is regarding his subject
rather
than a non graduate. This is
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because
, he has a better grasp on those topics which have
been taught
to him
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before
.
Therefore
, it's
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very
crucial that a person has an overview about what the
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job
would require
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before
stepping into it.

To summarize
,
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people
have argued whether a
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university
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degree
is more
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important
than
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work
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experience
. I
firmly
believe that,
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university
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degree
plays a bigger role than
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work
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experience
as each and
Did you mean "every one"?
everyone
should know the basics
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before
entering into their respective
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jobs
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to secure a good job. Others believe that employers value work experience more than a university degree. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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