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What advice will you like to give to a friend who is going to take a job interview. Explain why this suggestion is important. Include reasons and details to your response. v.1

What advice will you like to give to a friend who is going to take a job interview. Explain why this suggestion is important. Include reasons and details to your response. v. 1
We live in an age where people discard goods quickly. It has become a societal bad habit where its consequences are resulting in negative effects on both the environment and people. In this essay I will examine some results which lead to the problems created. People dump products mainly because early built-in obsolescence a deliberated design feature, We need only look at one such example that embodies a product built for very temporary life: the smartphone. Manufacturers on a nearly a yearly basis, bring out new models. Then, through clever advertising people are enticed to buy them. Let us consider the Apple company produces a new smartphone this month. It is normal that millions of customers will want to buy it as soon as possible, this leaves a deluge of unwanted old phones which might be resold or more probably discarded to waste disposal. This results in people subconsciously being cornered in consuming more than they need. Another problem is food packaging, which in general is often made from plastic or other man-made synthetic materials which are firstly difficult to organically break down and furthermore, bring great damage to the environment. For instance, one brought about by plastic bottles that have already caused irreparable damage to ocean-life and reefs. Therefore If people continue to throw things away in high volume, only further harm will be done. In conclusion, the so-called throw away society is a creation generated by both manufacturer's turning out short-lifespan products, compounded by over-packaging and decades of advertising in conditioning people's attitudes for easy gratification. As can be seen, if this behaviour continues, then the cost imposed on the environment will only grow more precarious.
We
live
in an age where
people
discard
goods
quickly
. It has become a societal
bad
habit where its consequences are resulting in
negative
effects on both the environment and
people
. In this essay I will examine
some
results which lead to the problems created.

People
dump products
mainly
because
early built-in obsolescence a deliberated design feature, We need
only
look at one such example that embodies a product built for
very
temporary life: the smartphone. Manufacturers on a
nearly
a yearly basis, bring out new models. Then, through clever advertising
people
are enticed
to
buy
them.
Let
us consider the Apple
company
produces a new smartphone this month. It is normal that millions of customers will want to
buy
it as
soon
as possible, this
leaves
a deluge of unwanted
old
phones which might be resold or more
probably
discarded to waste disposal. This results in
people
subconsciously
being cornered
in consuming more than they need.

Another problem is food packaging, which
in general
is
often
made from plastic or other
man
-made synthetic materials which are
firstly
difficult to
organically
break down and
furthermore
, bring great damage to the environment.
For instance
, one brought about by plastic bottles that have already caused irreparable damage to ocean-life and reefs.
Therefore
If
people
continue to throw things away in high volume,
only
further
harm will
be done
.

In conclusion
, the
so
-called throw away society is a creation generated by both manufacturer's turning out short-lifespan products, compounded by over-packaging and decades of advertising in conditioning
people
's attitudes for easy gratification. As can be
seen
, if this
behaviour
continues, then the cost imposed on the environment will
only
grow more precarious.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay What advice will you like to give to a friend who is going to take a job interview. Explain why this suggestion is important. Include reasons and details to your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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