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274. Your friend is unsure about what to wear for an important corporate interview in the morning. What is the proper attire for the interview and why? v.1

274. Your friend is unsure about what to wear for an important corporate interview in the morning. What is the proper attire for the interview and why? v. 1
It is believed that learning a new language is solely for the purpose of travelling or working abroad. Meanwhile, others argue that there are various reasons to be bilingual or multilingual. Although I am more in the favour of the latter opinion, the essay will discuss both views. It is obvious that studying foreign languages is beneficial for travelling and working overseas. When people work in a foreign country, they will spend most of their time with natives who are their colleagues, clients or authorities. Therefore, speaking the dialect is essential in order to communicate and handle problems. In terms of travelling, it is more likely for local people would be grateful and willing to offer help if tourists speak the lingo. However, I believe that there are more than on reason for people to learn a new language. Firstly, being bilingual or multilingual opens up social and cultural opportunities for people. Speaking another language allows people to interact with locals and understand the nuances of the country. Thus, they might have more chances to make friends, explore a new culture and integrate better into a new community. For example, thanks to my daily Japanese lessons I had when I lived in Japan a few years ago, not only could I converse with Japanese students, teachers and my host family, but I also attended different activities such as charity events, sport fixtures and culture festivals with them. Through these events, I got to know more about Japanese culture, history and society. Secondly, due to the knowledge about a country gained by speaking a foreign language, bilinguals and multilinguals tend to be more tolerant and more flexible than monolinguals. The more languages people speak, the more open-minded they become because of their awareness and comprehension of differences in colour variations. As a result, they see the world in a new way and are more respectful of other cultures, even their own ones. To conclude, aside from travelling and working, speaking other languages allows people to gain life and personal improvement as wells as new perspectives about the world.
It
is believed
that learning a
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new
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language
is
solely
for the purpose of
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travelling
or working abroad. Meanwhile, others argue that there are various reasons to be bilingual or multilingual. Although I am more in the
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favour
of the latter opinion, the essay will discuss both views.

It is obvious that studying foreign
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languages
is beneficial for
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travelling
and working overseas. When
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people
work in a foreign country, they will spend most of their time with natives who are their colleagues, clients or authorities.
Therefore
, speaking the dialect is essential in order to communicate and handle problems. In terms of
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travelling
, it is more likely for local
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people
would be grateful and willing to offer
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help
if tourists speak the lingo.

However
, I believe that there are more than on reason for
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people
to learn a
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new
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language
.
Firstly
, being bilingual or multilingual opens up social and cultural opportunities for
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people
. Speaking another
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language
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allows
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people
to interact with locals and understand the nuances of the country.
Thus
, they might have more chances to
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make
friends, explore a
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new
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culture
and integrate better into a
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new
community.
For example
, thanks to my daily Japanese lessons I had when I
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lived
in Japan a few years ago, not
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only
could I converse with Japanese students, teachers and my host family,
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but
I
also
attended
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different
activities such as charity
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events
, sport fixtures and
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culture
festivals with them. Through these
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events
, I
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got
to know more about Japanese
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culture
, history and society.
Secondly
, due to the knowledge about a country gained by speaking a foreign
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language
, bilinguals and
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multilinguals
tend to be more tolerant and more flexible than monolinguals. The more
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languages
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people
speak, the more open-minded they become
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because
of their awareness and comprehension of differences in
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colour
variations.
As a result
, they
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see
the world in a
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new
way and are more respectful of other
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cultures
, even their
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own
ones.

To conclude
, aside from
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travelling
and working, speaking other
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languages
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allows
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people
to gain life and personal improvement as wells as
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new
The usual preposition for "perspectives" is "on" not "about." Revise: "perspectives on".
perspectives about
the world.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 274. Your friend is unsure about what to wear for an important corporate interview in the morning. What is the proper attire for the interview and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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