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Some people prefer to live in a countryside, but other people like to live in a city. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

Some people prefer to live in a countryside, but other people like to live in a city. v. 1
Although, it is sometimes believed that issues relating to the environment should be combated globally, other people think that each nation should tackle its own environmental problems. In my opinion, dealing with environmental issues on a global scale has more profound effects that last longer. On the one hand, some people think dealing with environmental problems internationally speeds up the overall process of finding a solution and I agree. In other words, when all nations work together for a common goal, a solution is derived faster. For example, nations working collectively will bring more ideas than a single country at a time. Furthermore, the effect of collective efforts is more profound and tends to be a permanent solution. Each nation can make use of the several ideas rather than focusing on their localised strategies only in tackling their environmental problems. On the other hand, other people believe that dealing with environmental constraints nationally is more desirable because each nation has its own peculariaties and a solution that applies to one country may not work for the other. For instance, a country whose major environmental issue is plastic waste will require a different solution technique than one facing industrial waste problem. Consequently, each nation needs solutions that will meet their specific problems. Therefore, it will be better if they fix their environmental issues as a nation. In conclusion, despite people having different opinions on how environmental constraints should be combated, I consider that resolving problems pertaining to the environment universally will be more beneficial to all nations than nationalised strategies.
Although, it is
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issues
relating to the environment should
be combated
globally,
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other
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people
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think
that each
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nation
should tackle its
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own
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environmental
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problems
. In my opinion, dealing with
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environmental
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issues
on a global scale has more profound effects that last longer.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
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think
dealing with
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environmental
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problems
internationally
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speeds up
the
overall
process of finding a
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solution
and I
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agree
. In
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other
words, when all
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nations
work together for a common goal, a
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solution
is derived
faster.
For example
,
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nations
working
collectively
will bring more
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ideas
than a single country at a time.
Furthermore
, the effect of collective efforts is more profound and tends to be a permanent
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solution
. Each
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nation
can
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make
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use
of the several
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ideas
rather
than focusing on their
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localised
strategies
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only
in tackling their
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environmental
problems.

On the
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other
hand,
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other
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people
believe that dealing with
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environmental
constraints
nationally
is more desirable
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each
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nation
has its
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own
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peculariaties
and a
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solution
that
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applies to
one country may not work for the
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other
.
For instance
, a country whose major
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environmental
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issue
is plastic waste will require a
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different
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solution
technique than one facing industrial waste
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problem
.
Consequently
, each
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nation
needs
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solutions
that will
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meet
their specific
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problems
.
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, it will be better if they
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fix
their
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environmental
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issues
as a nation.

In conclusion
, despite
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people
having
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different
opinions on how
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environmental
constraints should
be combated
, I consider that resolving
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problems
pertaining to the environment
universally
will be more beneficial to all
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nations
than
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nationalised
strategies.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in a countryside, but other people like to live in a city. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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