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Some people prefer to read from paper books. Whilr others like to read eBooks. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

Some people prefer to read from paper books. Whilr others like to read eBooks. v. 1
In modern times, people are interested in the modernization of all parts of life. Some people believe that the historical buildings, which are under the protection of law, should be reconstructed in order to modernize them. This essay will show the importance of these buildings and provide some arguments that they have beneficial for our progression. Generally speaking, there is a wide range of reasons why the existence of monumental building is extremely important for us. Perhaps the main reason why people are in favour of this is because these buildings reflect our past. Today, there are countries which have thousands of years old history. These countries allow their people to know their cultural backgrounds. People in these countries teach the history to the children and also these children will teach that to their children. As a result, these cultural recollections can become a cultural heritage. Furthermore, this approach may provide the cultural and national integrity to people. Secondly, the areas where historical buildings stand give some opportunity to local people to earn money. These people usually depend on the money which they earned from the tourism revenue. If these buildings will be replaced by new buildings, it is highly likely that they might face with money issues and stop running their businesses. Furthermore, they will probably have to leave from their homes to find a job. There are also benefits of historical structures to the modern world. Some people claim that these monuments cannot help the development progress of us. Whereas, in most modern country, the sewage systems have been designed by using the Roman’s designs, which the Romans had gained the knowledge to design it. This is a good illustration why the history gives us opportunity to move forward and improve our knowledge. In conclusion, the idea that modernization of the historical buildings is a topic which is very relevant to modern society. However, I believe that these buildings and the historical heritage provided by them have undeniably positive effects on the world and people. If humans had not had a sense of the cultural integrity, our kind might not have existed in today as developed as we are.
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people
believe that the
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historical
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buildings
, which are under the protection of law, should
be reconstructed
in order to modernize them. This essay will
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show
the importance of these
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buildings
and provide
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some
arguments that they have beneficial for our progression.

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speaking, there is a wide range of reasons why the existence of monumental
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building
is
extremely
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important
for us. Perhaps the main reason why
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people
are in
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favour
of this is
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because
these
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buildings
reflect our past.
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Today
, there are
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countries
which have thousands of years
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old
history. These
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countries
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allow
their
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people
to know their
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cultural
backgrounds.
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People
in these
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countries
teach the history to the children and
also
these children will teach that to their children.
As a result
, these
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cultural
recollections can become a
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cultural
heritage.
Furthermore
, this approach may provide the
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cultural
and national integrity to
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people
.
Secondly
, the areas where
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historical
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buildings
stand give
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some
opportunity to local
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people
to earn money. These
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people
usually
depend on the money which they earned from the tourism revenue. If these
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buildings
will
be replaced
by new
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buildings
, it is
highly
likely that they might face with money issues and
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stop
running their businesses.
Furthermore
, they will
probably
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have to
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leave
from their homes to find a job.

There are
also
benefits of
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historical
structures to the
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modern
world.
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Some
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people
claim that these monuments cannot
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help
the development progress of us. Whereas, in most
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modern
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country
, the sewage systems have
been designed
by using the Roman’s designs, which the Romans had gained the knowledge to design it. This is a
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good
illustration why the history gives us opportunity to
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move
forward and
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improve
our knowledge.

In conclusion
, the
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idea
that modernization of the
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historical
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buildings
is a topic which is
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very
relevant to
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modern
society.
However
, I believe that these
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buildings
and the
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historical
heritage provided by them have
undeniably
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positive
effects on the world and
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people
. If humans had not had a sense of the
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cultural
integrity, our kind might not have existed in
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today
as developed as we are.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to read from paper books. Whilr others like to read eBooks. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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