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Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters Do you agree or disagree v.1

Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters v. 1
It is argued that high-income countries should provide humanitarian assistance to their poorer counterparts during natural catastrophes. This essay agrees with this statement because poor nations do not have enough resources to deal with such circumstances and foreign aid can also accelerate their recovery. Middle and low-income countries do not have sufficient money and infrastructure to assist their communities during a natural disaster. This can lead to many preventable deaths and potentiate the negative impact on people’s life. Moreover, when such catastrophes happen, the large number of people who need urgent help and the environmental damage that difficults the access to the area make the task very expensive and logistically challenging. For instance, the financial support and the humanitarian assistance given to Haiti by wealthier nations during the 2012s earthquake were pivotal to save hundreds of human lives. Tsunamis, earthquakes and storms can destroy entire cities and it is almost impossible for undeveloped countries to rebuild and regain growth by themselves. Rich nations assistance can provide the adequate support to achieve a faster infrastructural and economic recovery. To illustrate, the international help provided to Thailand after a tsunami, which destroyed many islands, hit the country’s coast in 2008 was one of the major aspects that made possible the impressive development that this nation has presented in the last years. In summary, high-income nations need to help poorer ones during environmental disasters. Undeveloped countries have very limited resources to face these challenges and international aid can save many lives and optimize their capacity to recover
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is argued
that high-income
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countries
should provide humanitarian assistance to their poorer counterparts during natural catastrophes. This essay
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agrees
with this statement
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because
poor
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nations
do not have
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enough
resources to deal with such circumstances and foreign aid can
also
accelerate their recovery.

Middle and low-income
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countries
do not have sufficient money and infrastructure to assist their communities during a natural disaster. This can lead to
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many
preventable deaths and potentiate the
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negative
impact on
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people
’s life.
Moreover
, when such catastrophes happen, the large number of
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people
who need urgent
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help
and the environmental damage that
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difficults
the access to the area
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make
the task
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very
expensive and
logistically
challenging.
For instance
, the financial support and the humanitarian assistance
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given
to Haiti by wealthier
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nations
during the 2012s earthquake were pivotal to save hundreds of human
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lives
.

Tsunamis, earthquakes and storms can
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destroy
entire cities and it is almost impossible for undeveloped
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countries
to rebuild and regain growth by themselves. Rich
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nations
assistance can provide the adequate support to achieve a faster infrastructural and economic recovery. To illustrate, the international
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help
provided to Thailand after a tsunami, which
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destroyed
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many
islands, hit the
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country’s
coast in 2008 was one of the major aspects that made possible the impressive development that this
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nation
has presented in the last years.

In summary, high-income
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nations
need to
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help
poorer ones during environmental disasters. Undeveloped
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countries
have
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very
limited resources to face these challenges and international aid can save
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many
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lives
and optimize their capacity to
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recover
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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