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Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree? v.4

Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. v. 4
It has been argued that economically backward countries should be helped by first world nations on humanitarian grounds during natural calamities. I agree with this view because developed countries have resources and technology which could be used for coping with these types of disasters. Also their expertise in medical sciences helps to mitigate the spread of diseases. To begin with, rich countries are well equipped to deal with disasters which are not man-made. They have surplus of basic necessities like drinkable water and non perishable foods which are of utmost importance when a calamity strikes. Along with the latest technology which helps with the forecast and ways to minimize impact, developed nations have specially trained people to help during the aftermath. For instance, the European Union has large aircrafts which help carry the supplies to areas where the infrastructure has been hit by the disaster. Secondly, developed nations have superior medical technology. Fighting the spread of epidemics is crucial after a natural calamity to reduce the death toll. Well-to-do nations have mobile medical units which help set up clinics in an efficient and swift manner wherever needed. For example, the United States of America have a special department US-AID and their sole purpose is to lead the rescue operations internationally where they lack manpower to deal with calamities. In conclusion, in my opinion the financially solid countries should definitely assist the developing and third-world states on empathetic terms during the natural disasters. This is because they are financially stable due to which they have spare resources and their proficiency in medicine benefits the suffering nation from spread of disease
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economically
backward
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countries
should be
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helped
by
first
world
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nations
on humanitarian grounds during natural calamities. I
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agree
with this view
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because
developed
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countries
have resources and technology which could be
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used
for coping with these types of disasters.
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Also
their expertise in medical sciences
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helps
to mitigate the spread of diseases.

To
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begin
with, rich
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countries
are
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well equipped
to deal with disasters which are not
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man
-made. They have surplus of
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basic necessities
like drinkable water and
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non perishable
foods which are of utmost importance when a calamity strikes. Along with the latest technology which
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helps
with the forecast and ways to minimize impact, developed
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nations
have
specially
trained
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people
to
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help
during the aftermath.
For instance
, the European Union has large
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aircrafts
which
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help
carry the supplies to areas where the infrastructure has
been hit
by the disaster.

Secondly
, developed
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nations
have superior medical technology. Fighting the spread of epidemics is crucial after a natural calamity to
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reduce
the death toll. Well-to-do
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nations
have mobile medical units which
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help
set up clinics in an efficient and swift manner wherever needed.
For example
, the United States of America have a special department US-AID and their sole purpose is to lead the rescue operations
internationally
where they lack manpower to deal with calamities.

In conclusion
, in my opinion the
financially
solid
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countries
should definitely assist the developing and third-world states on empathetic terms during the natural disasters. This is
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because
they are
financially
stable due to which they have spare resources and their proficiency in medicine benefits the suffering
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nation
from spread of
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disease
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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