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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience You should write at least 250 words. v.4

Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. v. 4
Businesses are the successful profession to earn in no time. Also, it’s progress rate majorly relates to the quality of workers, working under a roof to make the outgoing work successfully, but some businesses find problems with their employee’s skills, such as their cooperative, interpersonal issues. In my opinion, lacking in confidence, personal grooming and the communication are the main reasons of this agenda. The explanation of these points with possible solutions are explained in the further description. As far as confidence is concerned, it comes with the passage of time, but struggle is the main thing to make it work. Similarly, during educational career, studying different subjects, whose main purpose is to develop communication skills with the help of different interactive sessions, are the great way of boosting one self confidence to deal with people in their career life, makes it easier for any business to work in a comfortable environment. Furthermore, personal grooming is the thing that comes with the great effort one put to themselves, for example, when a person enters in their university life, interaction with different community as well as people, makes a great platform to boost their personal life with self-confidence, great communication enhancement as well as personality building that will help them in their professional career. In short, every problem has their solutions, all you need is to find them at the right time with possible solutions, same with the business world and their correlated solutions to facing problems in given time span.
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make
the outgoing work
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businesses
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skills
, such as their cooperative, interpersonal issues. In my opinion, lacking in confidence, personal grooming and the communication are the main reasons of this agenda. The explanation of these points with possible
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solutions
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description.

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time
,
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but
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make
it work.
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, during educational career, studying
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different
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skills
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self confidence
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people
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business
to work in a comfortable environment.

Furthermore
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comes
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for example
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different
community
as well
as
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people
,
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makes
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great
platform to boost their personal life with self-confidence,
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great
communication enhancement
as well
as personality building that will
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help
them in their professional career.

In short, every problem has their
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solutions
, all you need is to find them at the right
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time
with possible
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solutions
, same with the
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business
world and their correlated
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to facing problems in
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7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
As a hawk flieth not high with one wing, even so a man reacheth not to excellence with one tongue.
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IELTS essay Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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