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Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. v. 16

Some people think that rich countries do help to refugees with concern of primary assistance but others opposed to it. In this essay I will discuss why we should provide the helping hand to refugees? To First and foremost, wealthy nations have enough sources in terms of financial as well as commercial for survival for longer time. The countries such as Canada, U S A have higher living standards and also have facilities to make their economy stronger instead of others. They have more opportunities to improve and maintain their structure of countries. Moreover, Government of these countries should provide homes and necessary supplies in their bad times. On the other hand, Nobody wants to leave their home and their families unless it is essential to do so. Persons forced to leave their country due to war, conflict or persecution. Furthermore, wealthy economies have mentally or physically support of their nation. Refugees don't have it. According to U N report of 2018 studied that more than two-thirds of needy persons came from Syria, Afghanistan. We often see most of the foods and other things are wasted in functions so, it is better to save their lives and provide basic needs. As a Consequent they can live happy and will able to start a new life in new ways. It will be more beneficial for refugees to start a new journey of their future. In conclusion, It is a moral duty and responsibility to every nation to do help to others. On the other hand wealthy countries can afford easily and resettle the lives of refugees. They can support many human beings by providing them shelter.

IELTS essay Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.16

Some
people
think
that rich
countries
do
help
to
refugees
with concern of primary assistance
but
others opposed to it. In this essay I will discuss why we should provide the helping hand to refugees? To
First
and foremost, wealthy nations have
enough
sources in terms of financial
as well
as commercial for survival for longer time. The
countries
such as Canada, U S A have higher living standards and
also
have facilities to
make
their economy stronger
instead
of others. They have more opportunities to
improve
and maintain their structure of
countries
.
Moreover
,
Government
of these
countries
should provide homes and necessary supplies in their
bad
times. On the
other
hand, Nobody wants to
leave
their home and their families unless it is essential to do
so
. Persons forced to
leave
their
country
due to war, conflict or persecution.
Furthermore
, wealthy economies have mentally or
physically
support of their nation.
Refugees
don't have it. According to U N report of 2018 studied that more than two-thirds of needy persons came from Syria, Afghanistan. We
often
see
most of the foods and
other
things
are wasted
in functions
so
, it is better to save their
lives
and provide basic needs. As a Consequent they can
live
happy and
will able
to
start
a new life in new ways. It will be more beneficial for
refugees
to
start
a new journey of their future.
In conclusion
, It is a moral duty and responsibility to every nation to do
help
to others. On the
other
hand wealthy
countries
can afford
easily
and resettle the
lives
of
refugees
. They can support
many
human beings by providing them shelter.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
Essay
4 paragraphs
275 words
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