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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.13

Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. v. 13
Art is the externalization of the skills of an artist; therefore, some individuals opine that they should be provided full liberty to express their creativity, whereas fewer think it can be allowed only to an extent. Although I agree with the point that freedom is important for artists, the second half of the notion should also be taken into account. There are various reasons why some are in the favour to give full liberty to artists. Firstly, it is a known fact that people can understand the profound meaning of making when artists incorporate their creative thoughts into that art. To exemplify, people initially had downplayed the severity of global warming, until an article was published with potential causes by The Times Magazine. Secondly, it helps to unveil the social issues. It has been witnessed that different forms of art such as songs, stories, and movies have also been created awareness amongst the general populace. Thus, they should be allowed to express their vast knowledge. However, full autonomy may have an adverse effect on the individual and on the society because it would hurt the sentimental values of some masses when the artist's opinion contradicts their belief. For instance, an eminent singer Sangeeth Singh has released an album, in which few lyrics are against a particular religion which was resulted in communal riots. Hence, owing to this potential chaos, artists should limit themselves while dealing with crucial matters. To sum up, despite art can bring laurels, an artist achieves real success only when it doesn't forge any negative impact on the society as well as admired by everyone irrespective of their religion, community, and gender. I believe, in the future, the creators will be more conscious while making art.
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is the externalization of the
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skills
of an
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artist
;
therefore
,
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some
individuals opine that they should
be provided
full liberty to express their creativity, whereas fewer
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think
it can be
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allowed
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only
to an extent. Although I
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agree
with the point that freedom is
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important
for
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artists
, the second half of the notion should
also
be taken
into account.

There are various reasons why
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some
are in the
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favour
to give full liberty to
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artists
.
Firstly
, it is a known fact that
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people
can understand the profound meaning of making when
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artists
incorporate their creative thoughts into that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
. To exemplify,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
initially
had downplayed the severity of global warming, until an article
was published
with potential causes by The Times Magazine.
Secondly
, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to unveil the social issues. It has
been witnessed
that
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different
forms of
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art
such as songs, stories, and movies have
also
been created
awareness amongst the general populace.
Thus
, they should be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to express their vast knowledge.

However
, full autonomy may have an adverse effect on the individual and on the society
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it would hurt the sentimental values of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
masses when the artist's opinion contradicts their belief.
For instance
, an eminent singer
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Sangeeth
Singh has released an album, in which few lyrics are against a particular religion which
was resulted
in communal riots.
Hence
, owing to this potential chaos,
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artists
should limit themselves while dealing with crucial matters.

To sum up, despite
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art
can bring laurels, an
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artist
achieves real success
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
when it doesn't forge any
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on the society
as well
as admired by everyone irrespective of their religion, community, and gender. I believe, in the future, the creators will be more conscious while making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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