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Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.13

Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. v. 13
The internet has transcended national barriers in cultures and languages. Nowadays, people prefer to use various kinds of social media applications to talk, to follow the latest trend and to be an eyewitness of any international event instead of using the traditional method of mingling. However, an increasing use of social media sites has both pros and cons. This essay is an attempt to verify whether the merits outweigh the demerits. Looking at the negative side, this new culture encourages people to be less social and make them introvert. Socializing less with real people, make a person isolated, which is responsible for various mental illnesses. Additionally, the news from social sites are not always reliable, at times they have just an intention to spread rumours, which creates chaos in the society. For example, many a time forwarded messages or news stories are fake on such sites. Looking at the positive side, this type of online communication brought the world closer. People can communicate and learn an enormous number of new things from the people all over the world. Moreover, nowadays with the help of the social sites, people can make relationships and travel around the globe more than ever before. They can keep themselves updated with the current global affairs, which enables people to compete in the global market. In addition, common folks can enjoy an international event from any part of the world. For instance, how easily Indian people can watch a live international beauty contest, held in the US from their home country. To conclude, despite of having several disadvantages, these websites have a number of advantages, which are irrefutable. By looking at both sides, it can be easily said that, the merits outweigh drawbacks.
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people
prefer to
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use
various kinds of
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media applications to talk, to follow the latest trend and to be an eyewitness of any international
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event
instead
of using the traditional method of mingling.
However
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social
media sites has both pros and cons. This essay is an attempt to verify whether the merits outweigh the demerits.

Looking at the
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negative
side, this
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new
culture encourages
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people
to be less
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social
and
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make
them introvert. Socializing less with real
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people
,
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make
a person isolated, which is responsible for various mental illnesses.
Additionally
, the
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news
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social
sites are not always reliable, at times they have
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an intention to spread
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rumours
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a time forwarded messages or
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stories are fake on such sites.

Looking at the
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positive
side, this type of online communication brought the world closer.
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can communicate and learn an enormous number of
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all over the world.
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relationships and travel around the globe more than ever
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before
. They can
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keep
themselves updated with the
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current
global affairs, which enables
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people
to compete in the global market.
In addition
, common folks can enjoy an international
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event
from any part of the world.
For instance
, how
easily
Indian
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people
can
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watch
a
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international beauty contest, held in the US from their home country.

To conclude
,
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despite of
having several disadvantages, these websites have a number of advantages, which are irrefutable. By looking at both sides, it can be
easily
said that, the merits outweigh drawbacks.
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IELTS essay Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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