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We are increasingly becoming dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of v.1

We are increasingly becoming dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of v. 1
These days it is hard to imagine doing a business without involving computers since these machines have substantially alleviated the burden of manual work. The potential of computers is unprecedented: robots, run by computers, can conduct different variety of difficult surgeries; intelligence agencies can carry out reconnaissance operations just sitting in front of a computer connecting to satellites; et al, and is increasing. Nevertheless computers appeared in the end of the last century, the utter prospect of the machines can be obtained in the mid of twenty first century, according to NASA (National Aeronautics and Space Administration) and MIT (Massachusetts institute of Technology). Currently such projects as AI (Artificial Intelligence) are being intensively developed by corporations like Apple and Google. “Siri”, for instance, the product of Apple, has already learned to respond comprehensively to questions of its owners. The fact that “Siri” is only few years old provides us with a notion that futuristic future is not so far; like in fantastic movies where AI behaves as equal to human being or robots exist as a nation in the Earth. Thus, full capacity of computers still remains undiscovered. How good is this dependence on computers and what can bring the machine when we achieve its full potential are questions that may deter us from achieving it. Advantages of the dependence, however, can overwhelm drawbacks since computers have made our lifestyle significantly convenient. For example, every household appliances are run by electronic circuits, mathematicians no longer need to make calculations of massive numbers which is now done by computers, or surgeries conducted with assistance of robots at hospitals. These are the examples of explicit advantages of computers. Computers are one of the most essential inventions of mankind. The machines have improved our way of life and yet its most potential remains undiscovered. Thus, we have to use its benefits as well as be suspicious about what lies in shadows since everything unknown should be treated with caution.
These days it is
hard
to imagine doing a business without involving computers since these
machines
have
substantially
alleviated the burden of manual work. The potential of computers
is unprecedented
: robots, run by computers, can conduct
different
variety of difficult surgeries; intelligence agencies can carry out reconnaissance operations
just
sitting in front of a computer connecting to satellites;
et al
, and is increasing.

Nevertheless
computers appeared in the
end
of the last century, the utter prospect of the
machines
can
be obtained
in the mid of twenty
first
century, according to NASA (National Aeronautics and Space Administration) and MIT (
Massachusetts institute of Technology
).
Currently
such projects as AI (Artificial Intelligence) are being
intensively
developed by corporations like Apple and Google. “Siri”,
for instance
, the product of Apple, has already learned to respond
comprehensively
to questions of its owners. The fact that “Siri” is
only
few years
old
provides us with a notion that futuristic future is not
so
far; like in fantastic movies where AI behaves as equal to human being or robots exist as a nation in the Earth.
Thus
, full capacity of computers
still
remains undiscovered.

How
good
is this dependence on computers and what can bring the
machine
when we achieve its full potential are questions that may deter us from achieving it. Advantages of the dependence,
however
, can overwhelm drawbacks since computers have made our lifestyle
significantly
convenient.
For example
, every household appliances
are run
by electronic circuits, mathematicians no longer need to
make
calculations of massive numbers which is
now
done by computers, or surgeries conducted with assistance of robots at hospitals. These are the examples of explicit advantages of computers.

Computers are one of the most essential inventions of mankind. The
machines
have
improved
our way of life and
yet
its most potential remains undiscovered.
Thus
, we
have to
use
its benefits
as well
as be suspicious about what lies in shadows since everything unknown should
be treated
with caution.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay We are increasingly becoming dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of v. 1

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