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Workers are more satisfied when they have many different task to do during the workday than when they dpo similar task all day long. v.2

Workers are more satisfied when they have many different task to do during the workday than when they dpo similar task all day long. v. 2
Nowadays, one of the main factors for people to choose a job position or any other position that requires their involvement on a daily basis is its diversity of tasks and free will of action. By these, I mean, people like to deal with different tasks during their work time, and they tend to choose positions where they are mostly in control. Indisputably, many firms and companies, even the prestigious ones, are willing to guarantee this option to their applicants because they believe it will increase the overall job satisfaction for employees. I also find dealing with various kinds of tasks more preferable for reasons I will explore in the following essay. To begin with, diversity in tasks increases performance while working. To be more specific, people tend to show more interest in their jobs that are not routine and repetitive. Also, studies show that when individuals are dealing with a variety of assignments, their mental activity begins to increase. With this increase, they get to focus more on their tasks and hence, they will get better results. My experience in an Information Technology internship is a compelling example of this. When I started my work in that internship company, I was given regular tasks, like fixing a computer system or inserting customers' information into the database. After a while, I began to feel weary during the day and sometimes made mistakes in the simplest tasks. Then I decided to change my inputs, and therefore, I made an appointment with my supervisor. With desperation, I asked for a more diverse set of assignments, and I told him that I would prove my abilities within this opportunity. After he accepted my proposal, I felt enthusiastic toward my work and surprisingly, my performance boomed. Had I be given this option from the beginning, I would have been able to accomplish even more. Besides, giving different tasks to workers will make them a more skillful intellectual in different areas. In other words, when employees are dealing with something new, they have to learn new things, and this way, it increases their abilities. As for me in that internship, I learned to work with much different software and work with more people. I learned how to do something efficiently, and I was an expert in communicating with the customers. As a result, when I wanted to apply for a paid job, I had a better resume and experience, and many of my applications got accepted. Also, it boosted my self-confidence, as well. Then I was a good opponent for other applicants all over the country. Had I not been given different tasks in that internship, I would not have been able to think of that great companies, as well to apply. All in all, I firmly believe giving many different tasks to employees during the workday is beneficial on the folds of increasing job satisfaction and overall skillfulness of workers. Companies that do not include this option in their positions will lose numerous worthy applicants.
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position
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position
that requires their involvement on a daily basis is its diversity of
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tasks
and free will of action. By these, I mean,
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people
like to deal with
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different
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tasks
during their
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time, and they tend to choose
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where they are
mostly
in control.
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many
firms and
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companies
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because
they believe it will
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increase
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satisfaction for employees. I
also
find dealing with various kinds of
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more preferable for reasons I will explore in the following essay.

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with, diversity in
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people
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show
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jobs
that are not routine and repetitive.
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show
that when individuals are dealing with a variety of assignments, their mental activity
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, they
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to focus more on their
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and
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get
better results. My experience in an Information Technology internship is a compelling example of this. When I
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work
in that internship
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, I was
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regular
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made mistakes in the simplest
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tasks
. Then I decided to
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change
my inputs, and
therefore
, I made an appointment with my supervisor. With desperation, I
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asked for
a more diverse set of assignments, and I
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told
him that I would prove my abilities within this opportunity. After he
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accepted
my proposal, I felt enthusiastic toward my
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work
and
surprisingly
, my performance boomed. Had I
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this option from the beginning, I would have been able to accomplish even more.

Besides
, giving
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different
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tasks
to workers will
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make
them a more skillful intellectual in
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different
areas.
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, when employees are dealing with something new, they
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have to
learn new things, and this way, it
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increases
their abilities. As for me in that internship, I learned to
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work
with much
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different
software and
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work
with more
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people
. I learned how to do something
efficiently
, and I was an expert in communicating with the customers.
As a result
, when I wanted to apply for a paid
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job
, I had a better resume and experience, and
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many
of my applications
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got
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accepted
.
Also
, it boosted my self-confidence,
as well
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good
opponent for other applicants all over the country. Had I not been
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given
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different
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in that internship, I would not have been able to
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think
of that great
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companies
,
as well
to apply.

All in all, I
firmly
believe giving
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tasks
to employees during the workday is beneficial on the folds of increasing
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job
satisfaction and
overall
skillfulness of workers.
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that do not include this option in their
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will lose numerous worthy applicants.
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IELTS essay Workers are more satisfied when they have many different task to do during the workday than when they dpo similar task all day long. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
501 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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