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Water pollution is an extreme problem on a global scale which people are having to cope with on an increasingly regular basis. What are some main causes and solutions for this issue? v.2

Water pollution is an extreme problem on a global scale which people are having to cope with on an increasingly regular basis. What are some main causes and solutions for this issue? v. 2
Increasing water pollution around the globe is now a major conern for all countries. This essay will examine the possible outcomes of this situation and effective solutions to tackle this problem. The major problems caused due to unavailability of clean water are increased risk of health issues and use of chemical infested water. First of all, when people are unable to consume fresh water, they are forced to utilize or even drink unsafe water which eventually rises health problems like cholera, diarrhea in them. Secondly, the process of filtering water through chemicals will rise significantly which wont be beneficial for a human body in the long run. For instance, the majority of drinking water manufacturers were often found using purification tablets which was believed to cause various side-effects. The possible solutions for this growing issue are to protect the available water resources and raise awareness among people. When international policies and standards are introduced to strictly prohibit any harmful activities near water resources, this could aid to preserve or maintain cleanliness of water. To illustrate, for those who dump garbages or carries out any pollutive activities near water could be penalized by the government. As a result, there could be fewer chances of water pollution. Another possible measure for this issue is to bring awareness among people. That is to mean, people who utilizes water inefficiently should be given education related to water management so that the possibility of shortage of clean water could be reduced to an extent. To conclude, the lack of drinking water causes people to suffer from several health diseases and consume water. However, this issue can be minimized by protecting available water sources and raising awareness in different nations through the introduction of policies and programs.
Increasing
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water
pollution around the globe is
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now
a major
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conern
for all countries. This essay will examine the possible outcomes of this situation and effective solutions to tackle this problem.

The major problems caused due to unavailability of clean
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water
are increased
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risk
of health
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issues
and
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use
of chemical infested
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water
.
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First of all
, when
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people
are unable to consume fresh
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water
, they
are forced
to utilize or even drink unsafe
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water
which
eventually
rises health problems like cholera, diarrhea in them.
Secondly
, the process of filtering
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water
through chemicals will rise
significantly
which
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wont
be beneficial for a human body in the long run.
For instance
, the majority of drinking
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water
manufacturers were
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often
found using purification tablets which
was believed
to cause various
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side-effects
.

The possible solutions for this growing
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issue
are to protect the available
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water
resources and raise awareness among
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people
. When international policies and standards
are introduced
to
strictly
prohibit any harmful activities near
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water
resources, this could aid to preserve or maintain cleanliness of
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water
. To illustrate, for those who dump
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garbages
or carries out any
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pollutive
activities near
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water
could
be penalized
by the
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government
.
As a result
, there could be fewer chances of
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water
pollution. Another possible measure for this
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issue
is to bring awareness among
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people
.
That is
to mean,
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people
who
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utilizes
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water
inefficiently
should be
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given
education related to
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water
management
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so
that the possibility of shortage of clean
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water
could be
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reduced
to an extent.

To conclude
, the lack of drinking
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water
causes
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people
to suffer from several health diseases and consume
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water
.
However
, this
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issue
can
be minimized
by protecting available
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water
sources and raising awareness in
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different
nations through the introduction of policies and programs.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Water pollution is an extreme problem on a global scale which people are having to cope with on an increasingly regular basis. What are some main causes and solutions for this issue? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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