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q2 some students like to cram for exams. Others want to review what they have learned on a more regular basis. Which type of preparation do you prefer and why? v.1

q2 some students like to cram for exams. Others want to review what they have learned on a more regular basis. Which type of preparation do you prefer and why? v. 1
It is often argued that raising the number of sports centres will benefit the general health of pubic whilst, others say that additional measures on top of increasing such amenities are required. This essay will firstly discuss the reason for disagreement with the first statement and secondly, will suggest the other initiatives by which wellness of the humans can improve. To begin with, lack of motivation curbs individuals in maintaining the consistency in the fitness regime. Since people are exhausted with the workload they carry in their day-to-day lives, due to such factors they compromise on health in order to keep their work updated, and at the end of the day because of lack of interest to keep themselves fit, they fail to exercise on a daily basis. For example, statistics have proven that 62% of adults have failed to continue to visit a gym in just a month, after purchase of an annual subscription. This clearly shows that even though there are ample opportunities available, people tend to lose their chance to enhance healthy lifestyle purely as a consequence of lack of enthusiasm. Therefore, one key solution to overcome the sedentary lifestyle of the general public is 'awareness of human diseases'. Although people are educated in schools and colleges about the healthy body and essential steps to keep bodies fit, human memory fades. Hence, it is crucial that the government and private organisations promote physical activities, and constantly remind the significant importance of health and fitness which is imperative. For instance, conducting health campaigns about the risks of diabetes and cardiac arrests improves human fitness because it will help people to realise the impact of physical fitness on human health. In conclusion, recreational amenities in addition to awareness are a viable solution for the community for better health and wellbeing. As prevention is always better than cure, men and women should allocate some time to fitness, that will become an investment for the healthy body system.
It is
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often
argued that raising the number of sports
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centres
will benefit the general
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health
of
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pubic
whilst, others say that additional measures on top of increasing such amenities
are required
. This essay will
firstly
discuss the reason for disagreement with the
first
statement and
secondly
, will suggest the other initiatives by which wellness of the
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humans
can
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improve
.

To
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begin
with, lack of motivation curbs individuals in maintaining the consistency in the
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fitness
regime. Since
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people
are exhausted
with the workload they carry in their day-to-day
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lives
, due to such factors they compromise on
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health
in order to
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keep
their work updated, and at the
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end
of the day
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because
of lack of interest to
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keep
themselves fit, they fail to exercise on a daily basis.
For example
, statistics have proven that 62% of adults have failed to continue to visit a gym in
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just
a month, after
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purchase
of an annual subscription. This
clearly
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shows
that
even though
there are ample opportunities available,
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people
tend to lose their chance to enhance healthy lifestyle
purely
as a consequence of lack of enthusiasm.

Therefore
, one key solution to overcome the sedentary lifestyle of the
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general public
is 'awareness of
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human
diseases'. Although
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people
are educated
in schools and colleges about the healthy body and essential steps to
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keep
bodies fit,
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human
memory fades.
Hence
, it is crucial that the
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government
and private
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organisations
promote physical activities, and
constantly
remind the significant importance of
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health
and
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fitness
which is imperative.
For instance
, conducting
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health
campaigns about the
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risks
of diabetes and cardiac arrests
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improves
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human
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fitness
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because
it will
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help
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people
to
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realise
the impact of physical
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fitness
on
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human
health.

In conclusion
, recreational amenities
in addition
to awareness are a viable solution for the community for better
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health
and
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wellbeing
. As prevention is always better than cure,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
and women should allocate
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some
time to
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fitness
, that will become an investment for the healthy body system.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay q2 some students like to cram for exams. Others want to review what they have learned on a more regular basis. Which type of preparation do you prefer and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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