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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers. Others think that it depends on the attitude of the students. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.6

Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers. Others think that it depends on the attitude of the students. v. 6
Many people believe that experienced and confident teachers are the key towards a successful career whereas some argue that it totally depends upon student’s attitude. I believe that student’s success depends on their own hardwork and dedication. This essay will discuss both points of view. On the one hand, a lot of people believes that the reason behind students struggling for their career establishment is due to the unavailability of superior teachers. In other words, unqualified teachers, due to the lack of proper knowledge and research, they aim to provide inefficient knowledge and can’t deliver quality education to their students. As a result, most of the children becomes short on required skills and knowledge for employment opportunities. To prove, a recent survey on Hardford University showed that about 60% of the students wanted a change in their lecturers. On the contrary, it has been argued that a person’s interest and attitude defines their own future. That is to mean, one can gain educational success and values if the/ she has the willingness to study. However, student’s ability to achieve the best from education will differ if they don’t put their time and effort in learning despite whatever their professor teaches. For example, if the teachers seems helpless to students, an alternative could be the use of internet where learners can discover wide range of reading material, tutorials along with solutions of problems. In conclusion, although there are equal arguments on both sides of the debate, I think that educational success depends upon student’s point of view so they should invest their time and effort for it.
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people
believe that experienced and confident
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teachers
are the key towards a successful career whereas
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some
argue that it
totally
depends upon
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student’s
attitude. I believe that
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student’s
success depends on their
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hardwork
and dedication. This essay will discuss both points of view.

On the one hand,
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a lot of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believes that the reason behind
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students
struggling for their career establishment is due to the unavailability of superior
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teachers
.
In other words
, unqualified
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teachers
, due to the lack of proper knowledge and research, they aim to provide inefficient knowledge and can’t deliver quality education to their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
.
As a result
, most of the children becomes short on required
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and knowledge for employment opportunities. To prove, a recent survey on
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Hardford
University
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showed
that about 60% of the
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students
wanted a
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change
in their lecturers.

On the contrary
, it has
been argued
that a person’s interest and attitude defines their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
future.
That is
to mean, one can gain educational success and values if the/ she has the willingness to study.
However
,
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student’s
ability to achieve the best from education will differ if they don’t put their time and effort in learning despite whatever their professor teaches.
For example
, if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
seems helpless to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
, an alternative could be the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of internet where learners can discover wide range of reading material, tutorials along with solutions of problems.

In conclusion
, although there are equal arguments on both sides of the debate, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that educational success depends upon
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student’s
point of view
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so
they should invest their time and effort for it.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers. Others think that it depends on the attitude of the students. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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