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Managing global environmental issues should be handled by one organization on a global scale. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.1

Managing global environmental issues should be handled by one organization on a global scale. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 1
Environment problems are multi-faced. Placing the management of these issues on one particular company will be a burden on it in many respects. This essay will prove why this problem should be handled by multiple organizations for a better result. Handling multiple pollution issues concerning air, water and earth is a burden in many respects on an organization. Firstly, the vastness of the geographical area itself will make it impossible to be managed single handed. Secondly, like the world is multi-cultured the problem faced by each country are different from others. For instance, as per the report published by an NGO, the third world countries face problems which are totally different from that of developed countries. So, managing environmental problems based on physical territory of a nation will be a better idea to avoid clashes including emotional. On the other hand, if these problems are handled by organizations on country wise, locally sensitive issues can be taken care more effectively as they are aware of the way of life in a better way. To be more specific, in a country like India, local tribes living near forest depend on forest for firewood which is a banned practice in many developed countries. Another controversial issue is the argument over hole in the ozone layer, where the concern is for top industrialized nations. So these two contradictions really prove that localized management will be a better idea. To summarize, I agree with the fact that the environmental issue is a global problem and should be dealt in a global scale. But one organization handling it will be less effective and can get in to controversies when dealing with sensitive local issues. So, global effort with local participation will be the best solution.
Environment
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problems
are multi-faced. Placing the management of these
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issues
on one particular
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company
will be a burden on it in
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many
respects. This essay will prove why this
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problem
should
be handled
by multiple
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organizations
for a
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better
result.

Handling multiple pollution
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issues
concerning air, water and earth is a burden in
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many
respects on an
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organization
.
Firstly
, the vastness of the geographical area itself will
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make
it impossible to
be managed
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single handed
.
Secondly
, like the world is multi-cultured the
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problem
faced by each
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country
are
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different
from others.
For instance
, as per the report published by an NGO, the third world
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countries
face
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problems
which are
totally
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different
from that of developed
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countries
.
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So
, managing environmental
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problems
based on physical territory of a nation will be a
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better
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idea
to avoid clashes including emotional.

On the other hand
, if these
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problems
are handled
by
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organizations
on
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country
wise,
locally
sensitive
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issues
can
be taken
care more
effectively
as they are aware of the way of life in a
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better
way. To be more specific, in a
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country
like India, local tribes living near forest depend on forest for firewood which is a banned practice in
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many
developed
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countries
. Another controversial
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issue
is the argument over hole in the ozone layer, where the concern is for top industrialized nations.
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So
these two contradictions
really
prove that localized management will be a
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better
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idea
.

To summarize
, I
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agree with the fact that
the environmental
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issue
is a global
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problem
and should
be dealt
in a global scale.
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But
one
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organization
handling it will be less effective and can
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get
in to controversies when dealing with sensitive local
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issues
.
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So
, global effort with local participation will be the best solution.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Managing global environmental issues should be handled by one organization on a global scale. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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