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Watching television is a bad for children do you agree or disagree. v.1

Watching television is a bad for children v. 1
In the era of technology, watching television is increasing the trend by the children in all over the world. More and more children tend to watch the television for spending too much time in their daily life. Some experts believe that watching television is an evil for the kids, and they consider that it is a big dilemma of watching television, as it not only influence on the study, but also squander their time. However, others argue that it is a good impacts on the kids, as it increase the knowledge. Therefore, the below paragraphs will examine the reasons behind this phenomena, why watching television is a bad for children. To embark with, there are many reasons why watching television is an evil of the children? The first reason is that, when children watch TV in the daytime, especially those children who watch TV in not the limit. It affects their eyesight, and we can naturally see that in the word. Due to the watching TV people are addicting anchilles. Children face very difficult due this occur. Another reason is that, kids feel comfortable while watching the television. However it impacts their health, they become lazy as well as corpulent, which are raised the trend in all countries. What is more, children use to gaze TV in excess. Instead of the study time they watch technology resources like the television, which telecast attractive shows for the children as well as all persons. In despite of, they see two or three hours in their daily time. So, it wastes their time of study. On the flip side, there are some people who opine that watching television has a superior influence on kids. Firstly, it helps to enhance the creativity of the children, acknowledge which they can imagine in their critical thinking about last not but least we know very well there are many programs telecast on television which are based on education their enhance in the path of knowledge they know about the world what is happening in there around so that they believe that they believe it has a good impact on the kids. To conclude, I would say that, every coin has two aspects. So that watching television both positive and negative influence on children. I think, parents should limit their time of watching television. It has more negative than positive influence.
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television
is increasing the trend by the
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children
in all over the world. More and more
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children
tend to
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watch
the
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television
for spending too much
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time
in their daily life.
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Some
experts believe that watching
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television
is an evil for the
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kids
, and they consider that it is a
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big
dilemma of watching
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television
, as it not
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influence
on the study,
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also
squander their
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time
.
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, others argue that it is a
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good
impacts on the
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kids
, as it increase the knowledge.
Therefore
, the below paragraphs will examine the
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reasons
behind
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this
phenomena, why watching
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is a
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bad
for children.

To embark with, there are
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many
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reasons
why watching
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is an evil of the
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children
? The
first
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reason
is that, when
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children
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watch
TV in the daytime,
especially
those
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children
who
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watch
TV in not the limit. It affects their eyesight, and we can
naturally
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see
that in the word. Due to the watching TV
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people
are addicting
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anchilles
.
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face
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very
difficult due
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this occur
. Another
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reason
is that,
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kids
feel comfortable while watching the
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television
.
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However
it impacts their health, they become lazy
as well
as corpulent, which
are raised
the trend in all countries.
What is more
,
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children
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use to
gaze TV in excess.
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of the study
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time
they
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technology resources like the
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television
, which telecast attractive
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shows
for the
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children
as well
as all persons. In despite of, they
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see
two or three hours in their daily
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time
.
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, it wastes their
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time
of study.

On the flip side, there are
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some
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people
who opine that watching
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has a superior
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influence
on
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kids
.
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, it
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helps
to enhance the creativity of the
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children
, acknowledge which they can imagine in their critical thinking about last not
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least we know
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well there are
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programs telecast on
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television
which
are based
on education their enhance in the path of knowledge they know about the world what is happening in there around
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so
that they believe that they believe it has a
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good
impact on the kids.

To conclude
, I would say that, every coin has two aspects.
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that watching
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television
both
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positive
and
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negative
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influence
on
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children
. I
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think
, parents should limit their
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time
of watching
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. It has more
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negative
than
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positive
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.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Watching television is a bad for children v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
393 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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