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How often do you watch television? (Why/Why not? )Which television channel do you usually watch? (Why? )Do you enjoy the advertisements on television? (Why/Why not? )Do you think that most programmes on television are good? (Why/Why not? ) v.1

How often do you watch television? (Why/Why not? )Which television channel do you usually watch? (Why? )Do you enjoy the advertisements on television? (Why/Why not? )Do you think that most programmes on television are good? (Why/Why not? ) v. 1
Children are the pillars of society as the lives of future generations will one day lay in their hands. It is said courses about taking care of children should be mandatory for parents. I completely agree with this idea. The way parents nurture their children can affect the lives of other people too, as in today's modern world, families are the unbreakable blocks of community, in which one non-efficient block can harm other ones as well. For example, children who have not been taught social skills well, can lean to dysfunctional families in the future where they would ruin the life of their partner or future children and the number of endangered would grow progressively. Another reason coming to my mind regarding the fact that parent's education about growing a child should be compulsory is that nowadays, parents could not treat their children like how they were treated themselves by their parents as their lifestyles has changed a lot since the last few decades in a way which they do not spend enough time on doing research about raising children. This would increase their need for education to know exactly how to grow their children well enough to be a successful person. In conclusion, in my view, parents must be trained the ways of taking care of their children as it would decrease the chances of growing children who are harmful for society and would eliminate some concerns and stresses which would possibly come to parents when they are expecting a child.
Children
are the pillars of society as the
lives
of future generations will one day lay in their hands. It
is said
courses about taking care of
children
should be mandatory for
parents
. I completely
agree
with this
idea
.

The way
parents
nurture their
children
can affect the
lives
of other
people
too, as in
today
's modern world, families are the unbreakable blocks of community, in which one non-efficient block can harm other ones
as well
.
For example
,
children
who have not
been taught
social
skills
well, can lean to dysfunctional families in the future where they would ruin the life of their partner or future
children
and the number of endangered would grow
progressively
.

Another reason coming to my mind regarding the fact that parent's education about growing a child should be compulsory is that nowadays,
parents
could not treat their
children
like how they
were treated
themselves by their
parents
as their lifestyles has
changed
a lot since the last few decades in a way which they do not spend
enough
time on doing research about raising
children
. This would increase their need for education to know exactly how to grow their
children
well
enough
to be a successful person.

In conclusion
, in my view,
parents
must
be trained
the ways of taking care of their
children
as it would decrease the chances of growing
children
who are harmful for society and would eliminate
some
concerns and
stresses
which would
possibly
come
to
parents
when they are expecting a child.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay How often do you watch television? (Why/Why not? )Which television channel do you usually watch? (Why? )Do you enjoy the advertisements on television? (Why/Why not? )Do you think that most programmes on television are good? (Why/Why not? ) v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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