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Visitors should follow local customs and behaviours or the host country should welcome cultural differences? v.1

Visitors should follow local customs and behaviours or the host country should welcome cultural differences? v. 1
Whether visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviours or the host country should welcome cultural differences is a widely debated issue. This essay deals with it and gives my point of view. Visitors should respect the local customs, demeanours and cultures of the host country. If the guests behave abusively to the emcee, it is not the polite way in our society. Before going somewhere, it is better to know the local traditions of a definite country. Every country does have the same customs, cultures, behaviours and origins. If an individual follows the local customs of others in its respective places, it means mutual understanding to each other. If so, people on the earth will raise the esteem on one another and every country will reach a compromise, then the world will become the improving, beautiful and peaceful place ever to live in without wars. As an example, many leaders from the world visit Myanmar and they recognise mutual respects and show affection to others such as saying ‘mingalarpar’, making a gesture of respect by putting the palms together and raising them to the forehead. They also value the religious customs by taking off their shoes and wearing the appropriate dresses on the flat ground around the stupa and pagodas. Too many local residents warmly welcome them gladly and heartily. The ignorance of local language and custom may lead to a big problem since it is disrespectful to another culture. For another example, when I was travelling to Saudi Arabia as a visitor, I wore ‘abaya’ and covered my long hairs for going outside. This meant just paying respect for other culture and I did not lose my original identity. I even got some help and assistance from local people for my respect towards their traditions. Therefore, to sum up, I strongly agree that visitors should comply with customs and cultures of the host country.
Whether visitors to
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countries
should follow
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local
customs and
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behaviours
or the host
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country
should welcome cultural differences is a
widely
debated issue. This essay deals with it and gives my point of view.

Visitors should
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respect
the
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local
customs,
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demeanours
and
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cultures
of the host
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country
. If the guests behave
abusively
to the emcee, it is not the polite way in our society.
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Before
going somewhere, it is better to know the
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local
traditions of a
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definite
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country
. Every
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country
does have the same customs,
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cultures
,
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behaviours
and origins. If an individual follows the
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local
customs of others in its respective places, it means mutual understanding to each
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other
. If
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so
,
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people
on the earth will raise the esteem on one another and every
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country
will reach a compromise, then the world will become the improving,
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beautiful
and peaceful place ever to
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live
in without wars.

As an example,
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many
leaders from the world visit
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Myanmar and
they
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recognise
mutual respects and
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show
affection to others such as saying ‘
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mingalarpar
’, making a gesture of
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respect
by putting the palms together and raising them to the forehead. They
also
value the religious customs by taking off their shoes and wearing the appropriate dresses on the flat ground around the
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stupa
and pagodas. Too
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many
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local
residents
warmly
welcome them
gladly
and
heartily
. The ignorance of
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local
language and
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custom
may lead to a
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big
problem since it is disrespectful to another culture.

For another example, when I was travelling to Saudi Arabia as a visitor, I wore ‘
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abaya
’ and covered my long hairs for going outside. This meant
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just
paying
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respect
for
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other
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culture
and I did not lose my original identity. I even
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got
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some
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help
and assistance from
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local
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people
for my
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respect
towards their traditions.

Therefore
, to sum up, I
strongly
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agree
that visitors should comply with customs and
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cultures
of the host
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country
.
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26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Visitors should follow local customs and behaviours or the host country should welcome cultural differences? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
318 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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