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Some people think visitors to others countries should imitate local customers and behaviours. Some people disagree; they think the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss the two views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think visitors to others countries should imitate local customers and behaviours. Some people disagree; they think the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss the two views and give your opinion. v. 1
Tourism helps to bring many cultures of the world all together. Some people believe that the tourists should copy the public and their behaviours; whereas, some people think that a country should welcome diverse cultures. This essay will discuss both the views and provide evidence as to why we should greet different cultures. Every person has a different personality; similarly, every country has its unique attributes. Imitating the culture, behaviour, habits of various tourists can lead to the demolishing of their own individuality, race, custom and history of their provenance. If the visitors start simulating the local public then there would be no virtues and traditions left of their own nation. People coming from various countries bring different cultures to the place. Every country should respect the diversity of culture and greet them and accept them how they are. Culture is the only thing that binds the countrymen together. The varied culture leads to shaping of the society, and keeping the values of the provenance alive. Therefore, we should always welcome the differences of other countrymen. To conclude, welcoming the guests and their diverse backgrounds and lifestyle is different and copying them and applying them to ourselves is a separate thing. Therefore, imitating the culture or the behaviour of other countries will not lead a country anywhere. That is why, each and every nation should welcome the diversity of cast, culture, race of distinctive countries. This will help our own country grow not only financially, but also expand out in development in every way.
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believe that the tourists should copy the public and their
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country
should welcome diverse
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cultures
. This essay will discuss both the views and provide evidence as to why we should greet
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different
cultures.

Every person has a
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personality;
similarly
, every
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country
has its unique attributes. Imitating the
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culture
,
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behaviour
, habits of various tourists can lead to the demolishing of their
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individuality, race, custom and history of their provenance. If the visitors
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start
simulating the local public then there would be no virtues and traditions
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left
of their
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nation.

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coming from various
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bring
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cultures
to the place. Every
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country
should respect the diversity of
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culture
and greet them and accept them how they are.
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is the
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thing that binds the countrymen together. The varied
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culture
leads to shaping of the society, and keeping the values of the provenance alive.
Therefore
, we should always welcome the differences of other countrymen.

To conclude
, welcoming the guests and their diverse backgrounds and lifestyle is
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different
and copying them and applying them to ourselves is a separate thing.
Therefore
, imitating the
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culture
or the
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behaviour
of other
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countries
will not lead a
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country
anywhere.
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why, each and every nation should welcome the diversity of cast,
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culture
, race of distinctive
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countries
. This will
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help
our
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grow not
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financially
,
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expand out in development in every way.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay Some people think visitors to others countries should imitate local customers and behaviours. Some people disagree; they think the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss the two views and give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
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