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Various fertilizers are used now a days for food production. This is a practice that has more drawbacks than advantages. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Various fertilizers are used now a days for food production. This is a practice that has more drawbacks than advantages. v. 1
Since the advent of fertilizers and other crop producing chemicals, the farming output has increased significantly. Yet there are some sound scientific reasons that damage these crop additive cause to human health. I do not agree with the recommended idea, because when fertilizers are used in the appropriate doses, they are more advantageous in respect of yeild increment and the conservation of farmland. Firstly, fertilizers induce large harvest, and this has substantial effect on countries in need of additional sustenance. Also, the famines that have oocured due to the natural causes could have been averted, for example, Irish potato famine, would have been aleviated, if the technology of crop fertilizers was available to the farmers at that time. As history has shown, chemical additives can greatly increase the robustness of crops to disease and poor weather conditions, their judicious use has positive ramifications and must continue to be used. Secondly, as the farms ouput is exponentially increased by the use of farm aid substances, they decrease the area of land required to produce food, it can greatly benefit heavily populated countries, for instance, Indonesia. Chemical additives in such countries has enabled farmers to produce more food on the small plots of land. Therefore, maximum land can be preserved for accomodation of residents. Hence, it is another reason, why such substances are good for farms. In conclusion, afater analyzing above mentioned factors, it has been made clear that appropriate use of fertilizers can help both increase productivity and reserve land. It is hoped these substnces continue to be used in safe amount.
Since the advent of
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fertilizers
and other
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crop
producing chemicals, the farming output has increased
significantly
.
Yet
there are
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some
sound scientific reasons that damage these
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crop
additive cause to human health. I do not
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agree
with the recommended
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idea
,
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because
when
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fertilizers
are
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used
in the appropriate doses, they are more advantageous in respect of
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yeild
increment and the conservation of farmland.

Firstly
,
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fertilizers
induce large harvest, and this has substantial effect on countries in need of additional sustenance.
Also
, the famines that have
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oocured
due to the natural causes could have
been averted
,
for example
, Irish potato famine, would have been
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aleviated
, if the technology of
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crop
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fertilizers
was available to the farmers at that time. As history has shown, chemical additives can
greatly
increase the robustness of
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crops
to disease and poor weather conditions, their judicious
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use
has
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positive
ramifications and
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must
continue to be
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used
.

Secondly
, as the farms
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ouput
is
exponentially
increased by the
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use
of farm aid substances, they decrease the area of
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land
required to produce food, it can
greatly
benefit
heavily
populated countries,
for instance
, Indonesia. Chemical additives in such countries has enabled farmers to produce more food on the
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small
plots of
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land
.
Therefore
, maximum
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land
can
be preserved
for
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accomodation
of residents.
Hence
, it is another reason, why such substances are
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good
for farms.

In conclusion
,
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afater
analyzing above mentioned factors, it has
been made
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clear
that appropriate
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use
of
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fertilizers
can
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help
both increase productivity and reserve
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land
. It
is hoped
these
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substnces
continue to be
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used
in safe amount.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Various fertilizers are used now a days for food production. This is a practice that has more drawbacks than advantages. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.5
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